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two poles are better than one (Lyric) by <~>

I try to stay mindful not sure that I can I'm feeling a pull demand, demand caution's the watchword moderation, the game everything now measured and properly named tight in this track and keeping score I have a knack for knowing more I'm seeing things and keeping silent I answer questions with a smile, and a lowered brow, a tilted stare ask another I don't care no pleasing others no getting involved no riddle answered no problem solved I'm sleeping less and thinking more I am clearer, I am sure the others miss the easy truths heavy souls, with much to lose I'm purifying cleansing deep eating raw avoiding meat drinking everything in drams wary of adulterants of slipping away I won't be stopped I need a change one that's abrupt I knew it was coming sorry you didn't so don't try to help me it's none of your business I know what I'm doing I've been here before all of this pressure too much to ignore change is positive, change is good, now back the fuck off I'm in a mood...

UnityMitford 26-Nov-02/12:59 PM
the first part is angry, but it's more of a controlled anger, like that released on Poland back in '39. it weakens with the line "it won't be stopped." something about the timing of the rest is thrown off by this line and it doesn't fully recover (in my opinion).




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