blinded

Member since 2002 · Posted 26 Nov 2002 · 2 comments

you was there waiting patiently, but i never even notice, even when i treated you like dirt, even when i didnt even spoke you was there holping ill see what i saw today but i guess it was to late. when i saw you my heart started pounding and my stomach dropped down to my knees. i guess i derseved you treating me now like just a friend, i guess i deserved you walking right pass me and not even look at my way. and i guess i deserved the girl i chose over you to diss me and leave me cold just how i did to you.now all i ask for is for a chance, one last chance, but i dont have the courage to ask after all i haved done, so i hope you find a guy that will never treat you like i treated you. And all i could do now is sit and reminist about what i had and i didnt even know it, i guess i was just blinded...

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[n/a] Caducus 26-Nov-02/9:43 AM Reply

Pull up a chair, put your feet up, bite the end off a cuban and listen up !
I want to read your work BUT as i am reading it my flows interupted by crap spelling and i have to start again - NOT FAIR MAN ! I know some people on here get fucked off with being told they havent spelled this or that right but as poets in our own ego masichistical ways we are striving perfectionists so as i said change it and throw you my vote [[[thanks///

[n/a] Goose 26-Nov-02/10:32 AM Reply

I have to agree with Cadacus on this. The spelling and grammer errors make it almost unbearable to read. Give it a once over before you post next time. I do like the last line though...it sums it up nicely.