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blinded (Free verse) by bxjay170

you was there waiting patiently, but i never even notice, even when i treated you like dirt, even when i didnt even spoke you was there holping ill see what i saw today but i guess it was to late. when i saw you my heart started pounding and my stomach dropped down to my knees. i guess i derseved you treating me now like just a friend, i guess i deserved you walking right pass me and not even look at my way. and i guess i deserved the girl i chose over you to diss me and leave me cold just how i did to you.now all i ask for is for a chance, one last chance, but i dont have the courage to ask after all i haved done, so i hope you find a guy that will never treat you like i treated you. And all i could do now is sit and reminist about what i had and i didnt even know it, i guess i was just blinded...

Goose 26-Nov-02/10:32 AM
I have to agree with Cadacus on this. The spelling and grammer errors make it almost unbearable to read. Give it a once over before you post next time. I do like the last line though...it sums it up nicely.




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