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Sisters in Disquise

Member since 2002 · Posted 18 Nov 2002 · Edited 19 Nov 2002 · 15 comments

You are my right hand A sister in disguise I know what you mean I'm not blind behind these eyes You are my best friend We will and always will be Through thick and thin Together you and me I know that you'll always be near Even if we grow apart Because no matter what comes Memories will never part We have our differences It's obvious to all on the side But we take the others shit And we do it with pride I never thought I would Come to find a girl That felt just how I did And the way I saw the world Guys come and go But friends last a lifetime We've been through soo much Through such a short time No matter the time No matter the day I know no matter what I can always look your way I find it impossible To ever forget or hide Someone who has done soo much Who has always been by my side One day we will go And part to left and right But I know you'll always remain In my heart tucked in tight We have shared soo much pain And soo many tears We've shared so many laughs In only a few years The future can try to split us But it will take many tries Before we're gone for good For we're bound like sisters... in disguise.

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[1] god'swife 19-Nov-02/12:14 AM Reply

If I was your friend, I would never let you go out wearing this poem. It makes you look fat, and kinda stupid. O.K., really stupid.

[n/a] confuzdlilgirl › god'swife 19-Nov-02/4:22 PM Reply

Well i think really you dont know how to read poetry. IF you are talking about the second stanza and i could be wrong it just means though good times and hard. You seem to critic and say im bad at many of my writings. i used to believe you. thought i dont care anymore. now if there are things you dont get or think something i need to improve on please tell me. this is why i stayed i want to improve to be better because even if im not doing well i think i atleast show promise if im only shown my mistakes and not just struck down. how else do you expect me to improve? or do u not care for me too perhaps?? hmmm...

[n/a] razorgrin › confuzdlilgirl 20-Nov-02/7:18 AM Reply

"it's good ,really, you just can't read it right!" Please. If you don't want to be critiqued, go to a different website.I hear "grouphugsforpoets.com" is good. Many of your faults have been pointed out. Also, thoughI can't speak for all present, I can honestly say I don't care for you.

[6] Caducus 19-Nov-02/8:24 AM Reply

pretty good CLG, but check paragraphs 2/4 for errors as it kills the vibe your trying to emanate

[6] Goose 19-Nov-02/4:51 PM Reply

I like this. It makes me think about my own "sisters"

[0] poetandknowit 19-Nov-02/7:35 PM Reply

Now, I am really not sure that I know how to read poetry, especially poetry that is this bad, but I don't think you really understand friendship. I think you need to experience things before you actually write about them.

[n/a] confuzdlilgirl › poetandknowit 20-Nov-02/3:06 PM Reply

what is there that i dont know?? who are you to judge on a friendship you seem to know nothing about except that is in here. I like for people critique the writing style and rhyme verse meter ok but the feelings you know nothing of. You dont know me your making false jusgement here. i think there you dont know what you're talking about for its of me and my friend. in which you know nothing but what i have told you.

[0] poetandknowit › confuzdlilgirl 20-Nov-02/3:09 PM Reply

Well, I barely have any idea what you are saying considering you tied it up with poor english and typos.

[n/a] confuzdlilgirl › poetandknowit 22-Nov-02/3:34 PM Reply

sorry i just dont get why everyone that says something its usually negative. maybe you all are right i cant write, but it doesnt mean im going to stop. we studied a guys poetry today in english. he said that a good poem is one that reveals the truth.. that is what i do. they may not make sense nor have correct grammar, but if you get the message and relate isn't that all that matters?

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › confuzdlilgirl 22-Nov-02/4:08 PM Reply

No. If all that mattered was getting across a certain message it wouldn't be poetry, by definition. Or something.

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › poetandknowit 20-Nov-02/3:11 PM Reply

POMPOUSOMETER OVERLOAD

[0] poetandknowit › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 20-Nov-02/3:14 PM Reply

Please refer to the young lasses comments regarding "Cancer Haikus" and you will see from where my comment came. funny, ha, ha. Now lets all go get a drink and be bastards.

[n/a] confuzdlilgirl › poetandknowit 22-Nov-02/3:36 PM Reply

whne you wrote that you seemed to know nothin of what you were talking about and making a joke of it all. my mom had cancer. i have seen it all. it wasnt easy nor was it something everyoen can understand til it happens. WTF does that have to do with my poetry?? how i comment on it effects how u do me?? i hope im taking this all the wrong way, else you're just not even a person inside.

[0] poetandknowit › confuzdlilgirl 22-Nov-02/5:53 PM Reply

How do you get by in school writing like this? You are raping the English language. That is a crime. Pimple poems by 15 year olds are also a crime. Burn this at once or I am going to have someone call the FBI. As for the other comment: You were a foolish to make it and it basically showed that you do not have a clue as to what you are talking about. And you do not have any idea of what friendship is. You need to experience it properly to understand how to write a poem about it. Stay awake in English class and practice your spelling.

[6] sliver 20-Nov-02/10:46 AM Reply

I wonder why people have no friends. Welcome to slam the striving poet night.It is a little difficult to read, but good sentiment. keep writing,lil girl