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Sisters in Disquise (Free verse) by confuzdlilgirl You are my right hand
A sister in disguise
I know what you mean
I'm not blind behind these eyes
You are my best friend
We will and always will be
Through thick and thin
Together you and me
I know that you'll always be near
Even if we grow apart
Because no matter what comes
Memories will never part
We have our differences
It's obvious to all on the side
But we take the others shit
And we do it with pride
I never thought I would
Come to find a girl
That felt just how I did
And the way I saw the world
Guys come and go
But friends last a lifetime
We've been through soo much
Through such a short time
No matter the time
No matter the day
I know no matter what
I can always look your way
I find it impossible
To ever forget or hide
Someone who has done soo much
Who has always been by my side
One day we will go
And part to left and right
But I know you'll always remain
In my heart tucked in tight
We have shared soo much pain
And soo many tears
We've shared so many laughs
In only a few years
The future can try to split us
But it will take many tries
Before we're gone for good
For we're bound like sisters...
in disguise.
Up the ladder:
Truth Within
Down the ladder:
No name.
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 3.0
Posted: November 18, 2002 6:49 PM PST; Last modified: November 19, 2002 4:19 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.7615943 Overall Rank: 11563 Comments:
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god'swife @ 209.179.134.151
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19-Nov-02/12:14 AM
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If I was your friend, I would never let you go out wearing this poem. It makes you look fat, and kinda stupid. O.K., really stupid.
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confuzdlilgirl @ 12.75.140.60
> god'swife
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19-Nov-02/4:22 PM
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Well i think really you dont know how to read poetry. IF you are talking about the second stanza and i could be wrong it just means though good times and hard. You seem to critic and say im bad at many of my writings. i used to believe you. thought i dont care anymore. now if there are things you dont get or think something i need to improve on please tell me. this is why i stayed i want to improve to be better because even if im not doing well i think i atleast show promise if im only shown my mistakes and not just struck down. how else do you expect me to improve? or do u not care for me too perhaps?? hmmm...
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razorgrin @ 192.197.142.104
> confuzdlilgirl
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20-Nov-02/7:18 AM
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"it's good ,really, you just can't read it right!" Please. If you don't want to be critiqued, go to a different website.I hear "grouphugsforpoets.com" is good. Many of your faults have been pointed out. Also, thoughI can't speak for all present, I can honestly say I don't care for you.
pretty good CLG, but check paragraphs 2/4 for errors as it kills the vibe your trying to emanate
I like this. It makes me think about my own "sisters"
Now, I am really not sure that I know how to read poetry, especially poetry that is this bad, but I don't think you really understand friendship. I think you need to experience things before you actually write about them.
what is there that i dont know?? who are you to judge on a friendship you seem to know nothing about except that is in here. I like for people critique the writing style and rhyme verse meter ok but the feelings you know nothing of. You dont know me your making false jusgement here. i think there you dont know what you're talking about for its of me and my friend. in which you know nothing but what i have told you.
Well, I barely have any idea what you are saying considering you tied it up with poor english and typos.
sorry i just dont get why everyone that says something its usually negative. maybe you all are right i cant write, but it doesnt mean im going to stop. we studied a guys poetry today in english. he said that a good poem is one that reveals the truth.. that is what i do. they may not make sense nor have correct grammar, but if you get the message and relate isn't that all that matters?
No. If all that mattered was getting across a certain message it wouldn't be poetry, by definition. Or something.
POMPOUSOMETER OVERLOAD
Please refer to the young lasses comments regarding "Cancer Haikus" and you will see from where my comment came. funny, ha, ha. Now lets all go get a drink and be bastards.
whne you wrote that you seemed to know nothin of what you were talking about and making a joke of it all. my mom had cancer. i have seen it all. it wasnt easy nor was it something everyoen can understand til it happens. WTF does that have to do with my poetry?? how i comment on it effects how u do me?? i hope im taking this all the wrong way, else you're just not even a person inside.
How do you get by in school writing like this? You are raping the English language. That is a crime. Pimple poems by 15 year olds are also a crime. Burn this at once or I am going to have someone call the FBI. As for the other comment: You were a foolish to make it and it basically showed that you do not have a clue as to what you are talking about. And you do not have any idea of what friendship is. You need to experience it properly to understand how to write a poem about it. Stay awake in English class and practice your spelling.
I wonder why people have no friends. Welcome to slam the striving poet night.It is a little difficult to read, but good sentiment. keep writing,lil girl
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