Re: untitled by ThreeFourSix	23-Sep-02/2:54 PM
I hate it when they don't listen! 7 his could use more and not hurt it.
Re: Universal Musings by blu143	23-Sep-02/2:51 PM
Trim this by the first fifty-percent and let it fly.7
Re: Friends by Ashley	23-Sep-02/2:48 PM
I think you worked at this. Good feeling however you missed the flow.(Paddled too hard).7
Re: Me and She. by peach835	23-Sep-02/5:52 AM
Circ-ular! Love it! Fun! Poignant too.8
Re: Punishment and Punishment again by vulcan	23-Sep-02/5:49 AM
Sooooooo much with sooooo little. This is artful!!!!!! 9
Re: Pilgrim by timfowler	23-Sep-02/5:47 AM
A quietly powerful piece. Quite good acually. I'll leave it to others more Knowledgeable than I to "harsh your gig".8
Re: suffer the child by edge	23-Sep-02/5:43 AM
Oh how I hate pain and suffering. However as a lyric this does fly pretty easily. Can't think......8
Re: .:|bittersweet|:. by emman	23-Sep-02/5:38 AM
This has a subtle power,and 3 idea possibilities.Alittle ironing, simplification and BOOM! it's there. 8
Re: When The Iron Curtain Came Down by RoseEyes	23-Sep-02/5:33 AM
The"walls" went up late, then came down quickly.First group seems a little off. Easy to read,liked it.7
Re: Here In The Heart of Amber by Lenore	23-Sep-02/5:24 AM
Good stuff! Tree sap color? A girls broken heart? I like poems that lend themselves to 2 way thoughts. 8
Re: Faded by aperfecttool77	23-Sep-02/5:17 AM
Awareness is important, action is more. Good product. Go deeper!
Re: Ex In Bonds by OneFingerAnswer	22-Sep-02/7:04 PM
Nice rhyme! Almost fooled me with the title, or did you? Next time, turn it up!
Re: The End OF Me by Birdman42s	22-Sep-02/7:00 PM
If at first you don't succeed... Iron it out, otherwise it works.
Re: Lysander cried by bornagainpoet	22-Sep-02/6:57 PM
I like simplicity, could be modified to rhyme without losing it's intent. Good stuff!
Re: I Think by PawnedTidal	22-Sep-02/6:47 PM
Nice. Clean. Too surfacy though, you dipped well with the angel/amiss. Go deeper.
Re: america's promise by dylansong	22-Sep-02/6:38 PM
When I find a solution I'll let you know. I tire of tragedy though. Ironically, I cant help you.
Re: the silent storm by mallory180	22-Sep-02/6:32 PM
Distributors go round, 'till they get stuck. Don't ask 'cause I don't know. Less is more here I think. I felt it though. (Hoping to find???????)
Re: The Class of 2012 by jess33	22-Sep-02/6:27 PM
Simple, truthful. Rework for a little fluidity maybe? Agreeable!
Re: Martyr by kawakurdi	22-Sep-02/6:24 PM
Painful,cyclical. Difficult (for me). Pain, deep pain.
Re: For James Thomson(1834-1882):an Epitaph by vulcan	22-Sep-02/6:15 PM
Go on wit yo bad self!! I don't know this writer but now I want to.