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.:|bittersweet|:. (Free verse) by emman
Happiness doesn't seem to touch you you smile, but it never reaches your eyes why ? Does anything ever affect you ? At least in any good way ? ...or, at all ? Can you feel pain ? cold steel against yor naked skin or are you also numb ? Totally unaware of so much life around you Seeing everything through a filthy bubble a distortion of life as other people see it Or is it the other way around ? Hate and remorse keeps you going keeps you hoping You live only for it the sweet revenge the wonderful taste of vengeance Always fully aware of that every breath you take could be your last Filling your lungs with thick smoke closing your eyes feeling your heart beat slower... Was I ever worthy you ? will I ever be... ...complete without you

Up the ladder: Pedophile
Down the ladder: Skin

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Weighted score: 5.25
Overall Rank: 4008
Posted: September 19, 2002 8:56 PM PDT; Last modified: September 21, 2002 8:53 AM PDT
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Comments:
[7] vulcan @ 80.242.3.66 | 21-Sep-02/9:42 AM | Reply
Well!the personae's ambiguity of character leaves an impression on reader (at least on me)7
[6] royalflesh @ 64.170.53.6 | 21-Sep-02/10:09 PM | Reply
full of painfull images and hopefull (less) pains that others...(or one) causes. Pass the vermouth...my lips are burning.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.96.237 | 23-Sep-02/5:38 AM | Reply
This has a subtle power,and 3 idea possibilities.Alittle ironing, simplification and BOOM! it's there. 8
[9] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 5-Nov-02/2:41 PM | Reply
yes.this piece also is worth its weight in gold. a binding read through and through. 9.w
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