replying on Explorations Underground by ecargo
3 Apr 2006, 2:24 PM
The cadence is what reminded me, I guess.
on Explorations Underground by ecargo
3 Apr 2006, 2:19 PM
Woad? Yes! It's twoo! It's twoo! If you changed the color and the setting,(not that you would, and barrow to borough, You get another poem. I love the saluki lean. remember Christof?
on The Right Call by Dovina
22 Mar 2006, 9:16 AM
Oh the way kids play adults against one another. Sickos.
replying on Perils of the Learning Curve by Dovina
19 Mar 2006, 5:20 PM
Credentials? Doctors have credentials?
replying on Settling in by INTRANSIT
19 Mar 2006, 5:16 PM
I cut a few more ifs ands and buts out. closed the tercets and shifted the vibrato line around. Why tercets? Because I'm still grappling with the best use of line breaks thing. Now , where did I put my fender skirt.
on Louwanda by Jeremi B. Handrinos
19 Mar 2006, 5:04 PM
Sister of Towanda and Nuwanda, I'm sure.
on Perils of the Learning Curve by Dovina
19 Mar 2006, 5:02 PM
Uncharmed- is the best you can do at the end? Bah! 9.5
rounding down. If you have to rewrite the whole line, fix it.
rounding down. If you have to rewrite the whole line, fix it.
replying on Settling in by INTRANSIT
16 Mar 2006, 11:27 AM
Sorry ladies, the floor adores (like the rest of the house) the presence of its owner. And don't the groan/adore/floor almost sound like groans? And don't they make noises even if they're carpeted? Or does everyone own a high tech no-squeak flooring system. bleh. I'll take a house with character any day.
Thanks for the help. Is it better?
Thanks for the help. Is it better?
replying on Settling in by INTRANSIT
14 Mar 2006, 6:54 AM
Thanks guys! Right now the critiqing is better here than over at scrawl. Too bad really. I was all set to "get serious". Ha!
Nothing over there that I cant get here. And Have FUN doing it too!
Nothing over there that I cant get here. And Have FUN doing it too!
on Spoken word (draft) by Adriaan
13 Mar 2006, 7:34 PM
Keep going. until you run out of logic or it turns benign or rediculous. like my spelling. gah. really. finish this.
replying on Settling in by INTRANSIT
13 Mar 2006, 6:46 PM
I'm assuming the translation of this is:
You are an inanimate object that cannot write poetry.
Though, it could be a compliment suggesting I am a fixture of poemranker.
OR It could be a suggestion on how to improve the poem.
I don't suppose you might care to clue me in, would you?
You are an inanimate object that cannot write poetry.
Though, it could be a compliment suggesting I am a fixture of poemranker.
OR It could be a suggestion on how to improve the poem.
I don't suppose you might care to clue me in, would you?
replying on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina
13 Mar 2006, 3:05 PM
I've got no college or formal training in these things and it makes me think I'm missing out on something really important. Then comes a small woman in a bonnet with a gentle smile, and all is right again.
Poems (topics) waiting to be written by me:
Amish
Buffalo
Wind generators
Poems (topics) waiting to be written by me:
Amish
Buffalo
Wind generators
on Climbing the Wall by ecargo
13 Mar 2006, 2:59 PM
Fantastic beat. I thought you started out talking about trying to walk across a romp-a-room full of kids and their toys. HA! I just got back from Madison, where I read Bookends and Trapped in a horseshoe aloud to a crowd of....7? It seemed to go well.
replying on Settling in by INTRANSIT
13 Mar 2006, 2:55 PM
No , this is a "real" house. the onomatos were the inspiration. I love playing with sound.
on The Devil's Carnival by Ranger
13 Mar 2006, 2:51 PM
If there's anything wrong here, I can't find it. I saw a girl being tortured by others on an amusement ride or she was forced to ride and she didn't want to. Now I'm going to read the remarks and see how I did.
replying on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina
13 Mar 2006, 2:48 PM
In the amount of time it has taken me to read this funny , though useless, thread, an amish community has raised a barn. And. The youngsters built a 1/8 scale exact replica of the statue of liberty, then knocked it over, set it ablaze and had a
"cookout".
"cookout".
replying on Call me Floyed by FreeFormFixation
13 Mar 2006, 2:28 PM
IT AINT ABOUT YOU!!!!!