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Spoken word (draft)

Member since 2002 · Posted 11 Mar 2006 · 5 comments

Words are fluid until fixed into Writing Writing is the basis of Law Law is the codification of Behaviour Behaviour requires being decent which means asking consent before acting on intent or basically management of Feelings Feelings are fluid until fixed into Action Action is the basis of Life Life is a consequence of Sex ... (tbc)

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[n/a] Niphredil 11-Mar-06/11:14 AM Reply

I'm afraid this poem doesn't read as a whole at all. You don't seem to be saying anything meaningful; you start out with Words and end up with Sex. So? The title isn't really relevant to what you're saying, either.

I'd like to see this finished, with a beginning and an end. Perhaps then I can relate to what you're trying to say. As it is, it's a fragment, and I won't vote on it.

[n/a] faithmairee 12-Mar-06/1:17 PM Reply

i like a beginning and an ending, too...this left me scratching my head...in wonder

[n/a] Ranger 13-Mar-06/5:27 AM Reply

Decent fragment, the idea's pretty good - but I'm curious as to where you're going with it.

[6] Fayt 13-Mar-06/8:30 AM Reply

awkward piece, i dont think it comes together yet, but then again it is not complete; 6 for now, but im looking forward to more.

[7] INTRANSIT 13-Mar-06/7:34 PM Reply

Keep going. until you run out of logic or it turns benign or rediculous. like my spelling. gah. really. finish this.