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Spoken word (draft) (Free verse) by Adriaan Words are fluid until fixed into Writing
Writing is the basis of Law
Law is the codification of Behaviour
Behaviour requires being decent
which means asking consent
before acting on intent
or basically management
of Feelings
Feelings are fluid until fixed into Action
Action is the basis of Life
Life is a consequence of Sex
... (tbc)
Up the ladder:
Bare Feet, Bear Feet, a Bare Feat, and a Bear Feat
Down the ladder:
The Death of Us
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.3333335
Posted: March 11, 2006 8:26 AM PST; Last modified: March 11, 2006 8:26 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.9205313 Overall Rank: 9449 Comments:
i like a beginning and an ending, too...this left me scratching my head...in wonder
Decent fragment, the idea's pretty good - but I'm curious as to where you're going with it.
awkward piece, i dont think it comes together yet, but then again it is not complete; 6 for now, but im looking forward to more.
Keep going. until you run out of logic or it turns benign or rediculous. like my spelling. gah. really. finish this.
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I'd like to see this finished, with a beginning and an end. Perhaps then I can relate to what you're trying to say. As it is, it's a fragment, and I won't vote on it.