| Re: Call me Floyed by FreeFormFixation |
12-Mar-06/7:12 AM |
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as in the bob and tom show? They're funny, man. I swear to god they are.
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| Re: Sour Apple by ecargo |
11-Mar-06/9:05 PM |
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This screamed NYC at me. I hope that helps.
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| Re: a comment on Crowded by INTRANSIT |
11-Mar-06/4:53 PM |
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I hear ya! Villanelles are a bitch. But so worth it! I'm hoping I can get mine dialed in someday. Maybe I should take it to read aloud at the bookstore tomorrow night. HAHAHAHAHA! Who am I kidding. my balls aint that big. the arcs/dark isn't a bad idea.
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| Re: a comment on Crowded by INTRANSIT |
11-Mar-06/4:33 PM |
Thanks big R. And kudos for exposing that Imposter! I owe ya.
If I could pull this away from the end rhyme or atleast tone them down , it might be better . think so?
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| Re: a comment on Piano by Dovina |
10-Mar-06/6:11 AM |
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A large stringy mouth like a whales baleen. That thought occured to me as well.
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| Re: The Tale of Hominus Ominus by Blue Magpie |
10-Mar-06/6:03 AM |
"til his tears were dried " I think is off a half beat.
not really enough to worry about.
Groooooovy ,man.
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| Re: Piano by Dovina |
6-Mar-06/3:57 PM |
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Start by taking out all the unecessaries. The -but, the- ands etc. you're really on to something here. I like it. 8.5 though an easy ten. working my way home. Can't wait to get back to "normal". It's been a bad run this time out. Thanks to all for "holding down the fort".
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| Re: the disadvantages of dropping out by FreeFormFixation |
1-Mar-06/3:05 PM |
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Soo close, here. I wish I hadthe time.
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| Re: Simon's Legacy (draft) by Caducus |
1-Mar-06/3:00 PM |
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"Draft" o' the day. Cheers!
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| Re: a comment on Harp Song of the Prawne Men by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
1-Mar-06/7:57 AM |
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No! My name is PEPE! Get it right, okay?
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| Re: Today's Spam by nentwined |
27-Feb-06/12:46 PM |
Testing this kiosk.
So far so good. I was thinking about the senryu today. Perfect timing. love 'em!
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| Re: The Glass by dancin_n_da_moonlite |
24-Jan-06/4:21 PM |
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Blow this up. by that I mean add to it. talk more about the rim or the fit or scratches. this could be a meat and potatoes meal. add everything you can think of. then post again and I'll do what I can to help.
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| Re: When God is Needed No More by ALChemy |
24-Jan-06/1:21 PM |
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maybe someday I'll get to a poem first and actully have something to say.
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| Re: A Sheepâs Wish by Dovina |
24-Jan-06/1:18 PM |
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e-c has most of it nailed but, "choose me a mate"? Drop the -me- and i shant be bugged a-more.
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| Re: a comment on In praise of racism by INTRANSIT |
24-Jan-06/1:12 PM |
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That's partly the idea but there are parts that read funky.
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| Re: a comment on In praise of racism by INTRANSIT |
24-Jan-06/1:09 PM |
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Wow! I think Kansas just lost it's virginity.
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| Re: a comment on In praise of racism by INTRANSIT |
24-Jan-06/1:08 PM |
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No there isn't. And there's no cut and paste, either. Otherwise you'd be wearing a canard on your face. No, the case was an extra sticky enter key and I was battling the timer at the same time. Ran out before I could proofread. you wouldn't believe how hard it is to find a decent kiosk out here. I see a vaio with mo-tech in my future. Hopefully by mid year. And when I get it, I'm gonna " Jerk that smokewagon" and "burn you down". thanks for the (proof)read D.
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| Re: In praise of racism by INTRANSIT |
24-Jan-06/1:01 PM |
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Well, there went a perfectly good 6.0
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| Re: Racism 4 by Dovina |
17-Jan-06/5:47 PM |
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I think I will drop my next poem which also deals or doesn't deal with racism here before I drop it "over there".
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| Re: Birmingham gardens by INTRANSIT |
10-Jan-06/11:39 AM |
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Any last crits? It's gong in the mail today. Thanks guys!
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