poemranker ::20 most recent comments by INTRANSIT (181-200) and replies

Comments byINTRANSIT, 181–200 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on Call me Floyed by FreeFormFixation 12 Mar 2006, 7:12 AM
as in the bob and tom show? They're funny, man. I swear to god they are.
on Sour Apple by ecargo 11 Mar 2006, 9:05 PM
This screamed NYC at me. I hope that helps.
replying on Crowded by INTRANSIT 11 Mar 2006, 4:53 PM
I hear ya! Villanelles are a bitch. But so worth it! I'm hoping I can get mine dialed in someday. Maybe I should take it to read aloud at the bookstore tomorrow night. HAHAHAHAHA! Who am I kidding. my balls aint that big. the arcs/dark isn't a bad idea.
replying on Crowded by INTRANSIT 11 Mar 2006, 4:33 PM
Thanks big R. And kudos for exposing that Imposter! I owe ya.
If I could pull this away from the end rhyme or atleast tone them down , it might be better . think so?
replying on Piano by Dovina 10 Mar 2006, 6:11 AM
A large stringy mouth like a whales baleen. That thought occured to me as well.
on The Tale of Hominus Ominus by Blue Magpie 10 Mar 2006, 6:03 AM
"til his tears were dried " I think is off a half beat.
not really enough to worry about.

Groooooovy ,man.
on Piano by Dovina 6 Mar 2006, 3:57 PM
Start by taking out all the unecessaries. The -but, the- ands etc. you're really on to something here. I like it. 8.5 though an easy ten. working my way home. Can't wait to get back to "normal". It's been a bad run this time out. Thanks to all for "holding down the fort".
on the disadvantages of dropping out by FreeFormFixation 1 Mar 2006, 3:05 PM
Soo close, here. I wish I hadthe time.
on Simon's Legacy (draft) by Caducus 1 Mar 2006, 3:00 PM
"Draft" o' the day. Cheers!
replying on Harp Song of the Prawne Men by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 1 Mar 2006, 7:57 AM
No! My name is PEPE! Get it right, okay?
on Today's Spam by nentwined 27 Feb 2006, 12:46 PM
Testing this kiosk.

So far so good. I was thinking about the senryu today. Perfect timing. love 'em!
on The Glass by dancin_n_da_moonlite 24 Jan 2006, 4:21 PM
Blow this up. by that I mean add to it. talk more about the rim or the fit or scratches. this could be a meat and potatoes meal. add everything you can think of. then post again and I'll do what I can to help.
on When God is Needed No More by ALChemy 24 Jan 2006, 1:21 PM
maybe someday I'll get to a poem first and actully have something to say.
on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina 24 Jan 2006, 1:18 PM
e-c has most of it nailed but, "choose me a mate"? Drop the -me- and i shant be bugged a-more.
replying on In praise of racism by INTRANSIT 24 Jan 2006, 1:12 PM
That's partly the idea but there are parts that read funky.
replying on In praise of racism by INTRANSIT 24 Jan 2006, 1:09 PM
Wow! I think Kansas just lost it's virginity.
replying on In praise of racism by INTRANSIT 24 Jan 2006, 1:08 PM
No there isn't. And there's no cut and paste, either. Otherwise you'd be wearing a canard on your face. No, the case was an extra sticky enter key and I was battling the timer at the same time. Ran out before I could proofread. you wouldn't believe how hard it is to find a decent kiosk out here. I see a vaio with mo-tech in my future. Hopefully by mid year. And when I get it, I'm gonna " Jerk that smokewagon" and "burn you down". thanks for the (proof)read D.
on In praise of racism by INTRANSIT 24 Jan 2006, 1:01 PM
Well, there went a perfectly good 6.0
on Racism 4 by Dovina 17 Jan 2006, 5:47 PM
I think I will drop my next poem which also deals or doesn't deal with racism here before I drop it "over there".
on Birmingham gardens by INTRANSIT 10 Jan 2006, 11:39 AM
Any last crits? It's gong in the mail today. Thanks guys!