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The Glass (Free verse) by dancin_n_da_moonlite The Glass
separates me from life,
so I am seeing
from a different angle.
The Glass
makes everything
seem sharper
and harder
and edgier.
But thatâs what the glass
was
made
for.
I have been told
in the
past
that contacts
would be so much prettier and would most assuredly
bring out all my nice features.
But I have also been told in the past
that contacts
make it all
seem
real
and you can hardly tell they are there they are so comfortable.
No.
I donât want it
to
seem
real.
I want to feel it.
I want it to
remind me
that if I look
out the corner
of my eye
I can see the true life
on the other side
of The Glass.
Up the ladder:
Voice of the World
Down the ladder:
To my Moneta
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Posted: March 13, 2005 10:31 AM PST; Last modified: January 24, 2006 10:51 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.094852 Overall Rank: 6151 Comments:
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Dovina @ 12.72.14.110
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13-Mar-05/10:00 PM
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And glasses keep the bugs outa your eyes while cycling. I've been told that in the past, which is the same as "I've been told that."
Would you like to live in a boothe?
A G Q X R Z T G G W T s i q x u g g w w a a
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We all see the world through glass. I see it through the glass of a wine bottle. Sometimes I see the world through the glass of the Cathode Ray Tube. Glass is(at least)obvious where our own prejudices and cultural filters are not.
I thought this poem was very nice. Since I'm starting to read your works, it will serve to get me in the poetic mood for the rest of them. Good job; true and rhythmic.
Blow this up. by that I mean add to it. talk more about the rim or the fit or scratches. this could be a meat and potatoes meal. add everything you can think of. then post again and I'll do what I can to help.
thank you for the good advice.....
I will try to edit it as such, in the next few days or so -megan
Keep playing around with this one, because it really has got some good ideas and potential.
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