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Explorations Underground (Free verse) by ecargo How you look to me: Saluki lean,
scrawled sapphire, a warrior in woad
crawling ahead through this caustic barrow.
Lichen tawny, the light seems strained,
spreading oddly from the ovate wellhead
beneath the deadfall, a hole through the ancient
moraine, where this hollow hour holds the liquid,
thumping backbeat of some riverâs end.
Up the ladder:
After the ice season ~ shamelessly lewd revision
Down the ladder:
Time, Indeterminate
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 9.5
Posted: April 3, 2006 1:53 PM PDT; Last modified: April 3, 2006 1:53 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.2102365 Overall Rank: 974 Comments:
Woad? Yes! It's twoo! It's twoo! If you changed the color and the setting,(not that you would, and barrow to borough, You get another poem. I love the saluki lean. remember Christof?
I do remember Christof (that nice sculpture poem), but what does he have to do with Salukis? Or woad?
The cadence is what reminded me, I guess.
Or even "burrowed in the barrow".
last 3 lines wrap it up a treat.
I love the last line, money. *9*
'Lichen tawny' is possibly the finest descriptive pairing I've ever seen.
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Did you know color was very symbolic to Ancient Egyptians. Here, I found you a link:
http://www.egyptianmyths.net/colors.htm
Not Amon exactly, but I think Saluki was headed that way. Woad, though--well, I'm not sure. You'd think I'd know. ;)