| Re: "Monco" (In progress) by Alizarin_Crimson |
16-May-05/9:13 AM |
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The wavering oboe went Star-warsy on me for some reason. Cardboeard ghosttown/saturated survival rock.
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| Re: On the Bank of Lake Michigan by jessicazee |
16-May-05/8:58 AM |
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But what I really whant to know is: are you Hagarian or Rothian?
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| Re: Old Lady and The Sea by Joe-joe |
16-May-05/8:52 AM |
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Are you trying for a sonnet? Look at Beam Reach and compare it to The Catamaran. Both are mine, the catamaran being the first draft. You can hear the diff easily. " A comrade of the yawning deep " is excellent. 8. Hit it again.
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| Re: a comment on Baggage (3rd ending) by INTRANSIT |
16-May-05/5:45 AM |
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| Re: dit da haiku by nentwined |
15-May-05/7:09 PM |
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| Re: My Best Friend, 1985 by jessicazee |
11-May-05/5:20 PM |
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I'm sure it reads fast for a reason but it also reads like a list. Take some 120 grit to it.
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| Re: Mid Years by Dovina |
11-May-05/5:18 PM |
I knew that. I'll be posting a beeg wun monday morning. Make sure you have a comic book in your shorts.
It's gonna be Krrraken.
I'm.....al...most.....home....erghk.
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| Re: a comment on Dying breed by INTRANSIT |
11-May-05/5:10 PM |
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Shorter lines and more meat? You sound like my wife.
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| Re: Man Enough For Me by mystic enoch |
11-May-05/5:04 PM |
It's me! I'm here!
Nope. My shoe's untied.
I guess I'm
disqualified.
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| Re: a comment on Dying breed by INTRANSIT |
9-May-05/9:56 AM |
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DOH! Too bad it's not iambic. I tried to spondee while playing twister in a truckstop parking lot with some midgets. I kicked myself in the eye. Here are my problems with it: cross bridges of thought- is good but OF COURSE they're un-dewed. Bridges keep you out of the water, duh. And I think it's a bit of a leap to the closer, a chronic problem I seem to have. I appreciate your time though. Thanks!
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| Re: Panama by Dovina |
8-May-05/9:09 AM |
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dAAmnit girl! Um, this isn't people , is it? I can't wait to get home whee i'll have time to THINK!
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| Re: Old Friend by Dovina |
8-May-05/8:58 AM |
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Interesting. Starting out with a playful rhyme and then it gets all serious. I don't think it does the pet justice, though. do it again.
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| Re: PLEASE VOTE FOR MELANIE by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w |
5-May-05/2:41 PM |
" Stop reading Calvin Trillin"
poetandknowit
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| Re: Grandma and Grandpa by jessicazee |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
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The annual Oshkosh fly-in? Just wondering.
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| Re: a comment on The Instructor by Alizarin_Crimson |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
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I was thinking that too, but I like it better than -dash. It feels like a wider stroke.
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| Re: Actor by horus8 |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
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Sorry we couldn't meet fer a minute while I was out there. Bidness is bidness, right?
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| Re: a comment on Prickly Pear by Dovina |
22-Apr-05/2:02 PM |
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she's fondling her prickly pears? wha?
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| Re: standing outside the door by nentwined |
22-Apr-05/1:51 PM |
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| Re: Prickly Pear by Dovina |
22-Apr-05/1:41 PM |
I thought about p/p when I wrote my villanelle. I .just couldn't get it to work.
Is this zodiac? Or our very own Browne recluse?
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| Re: a comment on Baggage (3rd ending) by INTRANSIT |
22-Apr-05/6:31 AM |
Thanks Christof. Poetry is hard. I like it when I get a little closer to the "target". No problems with Edwards crits? I always consider all comments. Sometimes to my own detriment. lol.
Got a villanelle coming later today. Glad to see you again!
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