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Free verse № 124648

On the Bank of Lake Michigan

Member since 2002 · Posted 3 May 2005 · Edited 14 May 2005 · 6 comments

The water we share is the way we know east, our sunrises alewived beaches. A great lake, an erection at its end, pointing downward, tired. I called it an ocean in my youth, I thought I could see across to Michigan, “An optical illusion,” my dad would say, “A puddle on a hot street, a bag on the road you think is a cat.” The sun never sets on our water, moons, though, wane and swell. We swam in storms, naked, heedless, bathed in fresh water. The beach at the zoo downwind from seals, owls, lions in heat, field trips our fathers underwent a long time ago, feeding bears cheese crackers, otters just as funny, almost touching monkey’s hands, the elephants have all grown up.

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6 comments

[8] unknown^user 12-May-05/8:49 AM Reply
good imagery
[8] Dovina 12-May-05/12:03 PM Reply
Is an alwife a fish that spawns on the beach of Lake Michigan? The last line needs some help.
[8] wilco 12-May-05/6:08 PM Reply
I like it. Could be better...I don't know exactly. I'll leave it to you...It's good as it is...or make it great.
[n/a] deleted user 13-May-05/6:05 AM Reply
The erection at the end you call an ocean...
I get the picture, but perhaps you should put a blank line between 6 and 7 the prevent the reader from running off the stage...
[4] Stephen Robins 16-May-05/7:42 AM Reply
Disappointing.
[8] INTRANSIT 16-May-05/8:58 AM Reply
But what I really whant to know is: are you Hagarian or Rothian?