replying on Hoi Polloi by INTRANSIT
29 Dec 2005, 6:38 AM
Check Dovinas comments, they may clear it up. I just used my thesu for the title. dint know 'twas greek. :/
on My Christmas Gift by celticskatermatt1
29 Dec 2005, 6:35 AM
I'll echo the six. Read this aloud to yourself and you'll be able to fix it easily.
on Memoirs of a miners son by Caducus
29 Dec 2005, 6:26 AM
Good good good good good. Anvil eyed. Daimler. Could you make it longer? Seems shor for memoirs. 9.5
replying on Ennui by Sisterwolf
28 Dec 2005, 8:31 AM
Slow down Dovina. The original is still posted with all comments intact. Get some coffee.
on a cordial greeting by calliope
28 Dec 2005, 8:01 AM
the poison/blowgun/darts part needs redone. I think finding another image would be better. The last line jingles, perhaps another path to try.
on Ennui by Sisterwolf
28 Dec 2005, 7:51 AM
And, on we go. Nice clean-up. I personally would not mind if you stayed.
on For Love of Baseball by Dovina
28 Dec 2005, 7:46 AM
'mernin. I was too tired too read this last night. This morning is much better. I'm having trouble with the homerun. These days, homers happen all the time. Unless you're making a sexual refrence.
replying on Hoi Polloi by INTRANSIT
27 Dec 2005, 9:44 AM
Everyone has huffed in line at least once. but you got it. that's all that matters to me. thanks.
replying on Broken Bird by Sisterwolf
26 Dec 2005, 8:12 PM
Perhaps you should get in touch with your inner wolf, sister.
on Train of Thought by Sisterwolf
26 Dec 2005, 8:03 PM
Hmm. Periods, maybe. But without them it reads more like a child. Since it was a childs memory, this is ok by me. Periods would make it seem written more maturely, maybe too intently. Sorry I can't reach both ends of my shoelace this eve.
replying on Broken Bird by Sisterwolf
26 Dec 2005, 7:57 PM
You like her. I can tell.
replying on Hoi Polloi by INTRANSIT
26 Dec 2005, 7:51 PM
you're not even trying, are you?
replying on Hoi Polloi by INTRANSIT
26 Dec 2005, 7:50 PM
I read in a Penthouse once (might've been fiction) 'bout a gal who temped at one of them offices. Just what I was reading made me want to throw up. No, is the short answer.
on Irish Holliday by Dovina
6 Dec 2005, 7:04 AM
Consider yourself luckey. Santa might have sent you the Snuggle bear. Or a Lobster.
replying on Indian Song by ALChemy
28 Nov 2005, 11:56 AM
Perhaps if we all stand in a circle and hold hands chanting this, rockmage might come back.
replying on Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina
12 Nov 2005, 4:19 PM
Plumb would suggest same as would just alert. do what you will.