Re: a comment on Hoi Polloi by INTRANSIT	29-Dec-05/6:38 AM
Check Dovinas comments, they may clear it up. I just used my thesu for the title. dint know 'twas greek. :/
Re: My Christmas Gift by celticskatermatt1	29-Dec-05/6:35 AM
I'll echo the six. Read this aloud to yourself and you'll be able to fix it easily.
Re: Bleeding by Hadasl	29-Dec-05/6:33 AM
Stanza one is good. Stanza 2 does not carry the maturity of the first. Stanza 3, line 4 needs work. End period please.
Re: Memoirs of a miners son by Caducus	29-Dec-05/6:26 AM
Good good good good good. Anvil eyed. Daimler. Could you make it longer? Seems shor for memoirs. 9.5
Re: a comment on Ennui by Sisterwolf	28-Dec-05/8:31 AM
Slow down Dovina. The original is still posted with all comments intact. Get some coffee.
Re: a cordial greeting by calliope	28-Dec-05/8:01 AM
the poison/blowgun/darts part needs redone. I think finding another image would be better. The last line jingles, perhaps another path to try.
Re: Ennui by Sisterwolf	28-Dec-05/7:51 AM
And, on we go. Nice clean-up. I personally would not mind if you stayed.
Re: For Love of Baseball by Dovina	28-Dec-05/7:46 AM
'mernin. I was too tired too read this last night. This morning is much better. I'm having trouble with the homerun. These days, homers happen all the time. Unless you're making a sexual refrence.
Re: a comment on Hoi Polloi by INTRANSIT	27-Dec-05/9:44 AM
Everyone has huffed in line at least once. but you got it. that's all that matters to me. thanks.
Re: a comment on Broken Bird by Sisterwolf	26-Dec-05/8:12 PM
Perhaps you should get in touch with your inner wolf, sister.
Re: Train of Thought by Sisterwolf	26-Dec-05/8:03 PM
Hmm. Periods, maybe. But without them it reads more like a child. Since it was a childs memory, this is ok by me. Periods would make it seem written more maturely, maybe too intently. Sorry I can't reach both ends of my shoelace this eve.
Re: a comment on Broken Bird by Sisterwolf	26-Dec-05/7:57 PM
You like her. I can tell.
Re: a comment on Hoi Polloi by INTRANSIT	26-Dec-05/7:51 PM
you're not even trying, are you?
Re: a comment on Hoi Polloi by INTRANSIT	26-Dec-05/7:50 PM
I read in a Penthouse once (might've been fiction) 'bout a gal who temped at one of them offices. Just what I was reading made me want to throw up. No, is the short answer.
Re: why? by nentwined	26-Dec-05/7:46 PM
just when you thaink that this is it, a train throws itself under your feet.
Re: Irish Holliday by Dovina	6-Dec-05/7:04 AM
Consider yourself luckey. Santa might have sent you the Snuggle bear. Or a Lobster.
Re: a comment on Indian Song by ALChemy	28-Nov-05/11:56 AM
Perhaps if we all stand in a circle and hold hands chanting this, rockmage might come back.
Re: a comment on The Hawk by Dovina	12-Nov-05/4:49 PM
It might be the wine talking but.... no. This is ace.
Re: a comment on The Hawk by Dovina	12-Nov-05/4:48 PM
Like racism I suppose.
Re: a comment on Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina	12-Nov-05/4:19 PM
Plumb would suggest same as would just alert. do what you will.