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Indian Song

by ALChemy

Member since 2005 · Posted 27 Nov 2005 · Edited 27 Nov 2005 · 21 comments

Why high eye old man, bell led in my van at ease. My gray haven ain't she in sin. In christmas home aside. Solid all heft of you tour is erect for you. My eye old wild man, got it earned is said.

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[n/a] ALChemy 27-Nov-05/5:49 PM Reply
This one's very experimental. Here's your hint, the first line is "Wildman".
[10] zodiac 28-Nov-05/4:10 AM Reply
Clever. I'm not sure I got lines 4 and 5, but what I think I got I like.
[n/a] ALChemy › zodiac 28-Nov-05/5:53 AM Reply
Thanks. This was inspired by the cleverly cryptic "r-p-o-p-h-e-s-s-a-g-r" poem by Cummings.
Line 4 is a bit of a stretch. The 1st word of L4 is "Increased".
The 1st word of line 5 is "So".
Hope that helps a little.
[10] zodiac › ALChemy 28-Nov-05/6:24 AM Reply
After we've given everyone a chance, I'll post my interpretation and see how far off it is. I've definitely got line 5, but now I'm worried about 6, which for me involved the unlikely word "resurrect".
[n/a] ALChemy › zodiac 28-Nov-05/7:19 AM Reply
You're on track. L4 is the weakest by far. If your interpretation sounds better than the original then I may lie and adopt it as my own.
[6] cyan9 28-Nov-05/5:30 AM Reply
After reading the comments below, Ive been looking for all sorts of hidden patterns... but nothing so far, otherwise it seems kind of like good ole hoe-down.
[n/a] ALChemy › cyan9 28-Nov-05/5:59 AM Reply
Think of that generic indian music you hear in old westerns (Nahhh-nah-nana-nah-nahhh) and then try reading the poem out loud to that rhythm, then listen for the hidden words.
[n/a] Dovina › ALChemy 28-Nov-05/11:18 AM Reply
Okay, done that. Draws a blank.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › Dovina 28-Nov-05/11:56 AM Reply
Perhaps if we all stand in a circle and hold hands chanting this, rockmage might come back.
[n/a] ALChemy › INTRANSIT 28-Nov-05/12:10 PM Reply
That's the best interpretation of the undecoded version of cryptic poem I've ever read. You know I do miss the old fart. Him and Bethy. She's somewhere singing to the robins in the trees and he's throwing his rock sculptures at them.
[n/a] ALChemy › Dovina 28-Nov-05/12:19 PM Reply
Boy, Zodiac's gonna have no competition on this one. Try doubling up the syllables in some of the words by doubling the vowel sounds.
Wildman= Wi/i/i/ld/man= Why/ high/ eye/ old/ man. See?
It's suppose to force you to read it the way it would sound if it were sung to generic indian music.
[9] wilco 28-Nov-05/2:21 PM Reply
Wild man,
bled in my vanities;
My graven ancient,
increase mass homicide.

So little left of you
to resurrect for you.
Wild man
God interred his head.

I dunno...best I could come up with.

9 for making me think...I'd give you a 10 but you made me think and that pissed me off. ;)
[n/a] ALChemy › wilco 28-Nov-05/9:18 PM Reply
Almost perfect. Line 8 is slightly different but I like your interpretation. Your line 7 and 3 is missing one word. Otherwise some damn impressive deduction on your part.
[10] zodiac › wilco 29-Nov-05/2:17 AM Reply
I got "God turned his head," but yours is better. Also, leave "sin" on the end of line 3.

AlChemy: If he's right on line 4, change it. The second stanza is perfect, both translated and not.
[n/a] ALChemy › zodiac 29-Nov-05/3:40 AM Reply
I know L4 sucks. I'm already trying to think something up.
It was my original dream to make both versions make sense but then I went almost nuts trying.
[n/a] LilMsLadyPoet › ALChemy 12-Dec-05/11:02 AM Reply
Okay...then might I challenge you to make two versions that make sense standing independently? In a new one, of course!
[10] zodiac › LilMsLadyPoet 12-Dec-05/12:01 PM Reply
It's been done.

http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=134560
[n/a] ALChemy › zodiac 12-Dec-05/3:47 PM Reply
And in 2 different languages, ya darn show-off.
Mine is hard to do because it also has to get the rhythm of the music perfect. Yours would have to start something like "Duh a furs no oh well" If you can do that and make both versions make sense... well I'll celebrate your birthday instead of Jesus'.
[n/a] LilMsLadyPoet › ALChemy 13-Dec-05/9:42 AM Reply
I went and read, and thought...nope! Not the same thing at all. You get credit for two languages, that is all, Zodiac. What Alchemy did is different, and intellectualy very stimulating for all involved. :>Intellegence versus education. Creativity versus regurgitation. Art that involves and engages the looker-on versus art for display purposes.
[10] zodiac › LilMsLadyPoet 13-Dec-05/9:46 AM Reply
I'm sure mine engages Arabs more than his does.
[n/a] LilMsLadyPoet › zodiac 13-Dec-05/10:42 AM Reply
Oh, Poemranker has a large Arab readership? I didn't know. I suppose I have offended alot of them with my erotic poetry, comments, and generally dominant female attitude. (Of course, I know that they all will want to attack me at every turn for such things, while they secretly read every dirty little seduction I write while trying to abtain my IM name or email, so they can send me dirty picture of themselves. I am being unfair, I know....