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Indian Song (Lyric) by ALChemy

Why high eye old man, bell led in my van at ease. My gray haven ain't she in sin. In christmas home aside. Solid all heft of you tour is erect for you. My eye old wild man, got it earned is said.

zodiac 29-Nov-05/2:17 AM
I got "God turned his head," but yours is better. Also, leave "sin" on the end of line 3.

AlChemy: If he's right on line 4, change it. The second stanza is perfect, both translated and not.




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