replying on Headlines by Dovina
12 Nov 2005, 4:13 PM
I thought that too. then I read a hedline in the Milwaukee journal that suggested there is some kind of defence in saurkraut. not kidding.
on Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina
9 Nov 2005, 2:41 PM
I like it , except that, alert and plum seems redundant within the line.
replying on Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina
8 Nov 2005, 7:45 AM
We are. We pay tax at the pump and then a road -use tax based on the amount of miles driven in each state. The highways were originally designed to allow our military quick movement around the country. Secondly as intrastate and interstate commerce, trucking. Thirdly, recreation. You have been double trumped. please try again.
on Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina
7 Nov 2005, 3:21 PM
Where's my kick on credit?
on Bluegrass Blueshield by T. Jonathron Remp
7 Nov 2005, 3:20 PM
What's the Johnson-wax effect, then?
on To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy
7 Nov 2005, 3:13 PM
wow. I'm waaaaaay off. I thought it was a litany against blacks! HA! I gotta get out more.
replying on To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy
7 Nov 2005, 3:11 PM
You're a Black Irishman? Do you hate yourself?
on A Joining Of Souls (edit) by Caducus
4 Nov 2005, 6:57 PM
The last stanza: Remnants of her remain? Yes, that's what remnants do. (Boooo Hissssss)
Lose the corny end rhyme.
"from beneath the lashes" ...(holds arms straight up, palms inward)
Lose the corny end rhyme.
"from beneath the lashes" ...(holds arms straight up, palms inward)
replying on Posted Pelicans by Dovina
4 Nov 2005, 6:47 PM
It's a losng shot but I think she's going -calk/heel- meaning -he stows his beak, resting it on his back/under a wing. Lots of birds do this. If you think about how we "heel" our tongues or tell a dog to heel meaning stay close, I think that's what she's going for. Or maybe she's begging for a pet Capybara for Christmas. I can't be sure. The on/off rhyming bugs me. The beat, does not.
replying on Steak and Satin by Dovina
4 Nov 2005, 6:31 PM
Solly Cholly. My mother is not alive. Nor was she Norwegian. The only time I've done chin-ups, was when I kissed pavement with my chin at Concrete Curl skatepark in Aurora Co. Mid, Erm, 70's?
And I haven't had anything to post lately, can I have a shin kick on credit?
And I haven't had anything to post lately, can I have a shin kick on credit?
on Steak and Satin by Dovina
4 Nov 2005, 6:17 AM
In the first and second you need to bring out more of the body part and less of the decoration. Lose "induce" altogether. The rest seems to move nicely.
Now. would you kindly tell me who put the lefsa in my pants?
Now. would you kindly tell me who put the lefsa in my pants?
on island nation by skaskowski
1 Nov 2005, 3:02 PM
Which it is soused hogs face?
on The Gospel According to Zodiac by Dovina
31 Oct 2005, 6:55 AM
One slice does it all.
replying on Poetry is where you find it by INTRANSIT
29 Oct 2005, 6:08 PM
Oh be quiet and mix the stuff. I wanna see if it explodes.
on brave new world still a bit timid by FreeFormFixation
29 Oct 2005, 6:29 AM
"broadband subterranean tunnels" perfect.
replying on Poetry is where you find it by INTRANSIT
29 Oct 2005, 6:23 AM
You will recieve, this Christmas, from Dovina:
A new set of Sawzall blades.
A new set of Sawzall blades.
replying on Poetry is where you find it by INTRANSIT
29 Oct 2005, 6:22 AM
You will recieve ,this Christmas, from Zodiac:
A cat-o-nine tails, Some kind of fastening device-fuzzy velcro-, possibly just rope, and a ball gag.
A cat-o-nine tails, Some kind of fastening device-fuzzy velcro-, possibly just rope, and a ball gag.
on when i make sculpture by ay deee
28 Oct 2005, 3:53 PM
rogue -do- in the fourth.