| Re: a comment on Headlines by Dovina |
12-Nov-05/4:13 PM |
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I thought that too. then I read a hedline in the Milwaukee journal that suggested there is some kind of defence in saurkraut. not kidding.
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| Re: a comment on Headlines by Dovina |
12-Nov-05/4:11 PM |
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one that I'd pay for, too.
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| Re: The Hawk by Dovina |
12-Nov-05/3:56 PM |
Lose the howling , keep the howl.
Describe the "rank" scent.
"like pebbles, city deep"
<~> always jumps my -but- so I'm gonna jump yours. Lose it!
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| Re: Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina |
9-Nov-05/2:41 PM |
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I like it , except that, alert and plum seems redundant within the line.
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| Re: a comment on Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina |
8-Nov-05/7:45 AM |
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We are. We pay tax at the pump and then a road -use tax based on the amount of miles driven in each state. The highways were originally designed to allow our military quick movement around the country. Secondly as intrastate and interstate commerce, trucking. Thirdly, recreation. You have been double trumped. please try again.
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| Re: Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina |
7-Nov-05/3:21 PM |
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Where's my kick on credit?
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| Re: Bluegrass Blueshield by T. Jonathron Remp |
7-Nov-05/3:20 PM |
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What's the Johnson-wax effect, then?
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| Re: To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy |
7-Nov-05/3:13 PM |
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wow. I'm waaaaaay off. I thought it was a litany against blacks! HA! I gotta get out more.
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| Re: a comment on To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy |
7-Nov-05/3:11 PM |
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You're a Black Irishman? Do you hate yourself?
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| Re: A Joining Of Souls (edit) by Caducus |
4-Nov-05/6:57 PM |
The last stanza: Remnants of her remain? Yes, that's what remnants do. (Boooo Hissssss)
Lose the corny end rhyme.
"from beneath the lashes" ...(holds arms straight up, palms inward)
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| Re: a comment on Posted Pelicans by Dovina |
4-Nov-05/6:47 PM |
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It's a losng shot but I think she's going -calk/heel- meaning -he stows his beak, resting it on his back/under a wing. Lots of birds do this. If you think about how we "heel" our tongues or tell a dog to heel meaning stay close, I think that's what she's going for. Or maybe she's begging for a pet Capybara for Christmas. I can't be sure. The on/off rhyming bugs me. The beat, does not.
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| Re: a comment on Steak and Satin by Dovina |
4-Nov-05/6:31 PM |
Solly Cholly. My mother is not alive. Nor was she Norwegian. The only time I've done chin-ups, was when I kissed pavement with my chin at Concrete Curl skatepark in Aurora Co. Mid, Erm, 70's?
And I haven't had anything to post lately, can I have a shin kick on credit?
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| Re: Steak and Satin by Dovina |
4-Nov-05/6:17 AM |
In the first and second you need to bring out more of the body part and less of the decoration. Lose "induce" altogether. The rest seems to move nicely.
Now. would you kindly tell me who put the lefsa in my pants?
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| Re: island nation by skaskowski |
1-Nov-05/3:02 PM |
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Which it is soused hogs face?
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| Re: The Gospel According to Zodiac by Dovina |
31-Oct-05/6:55 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Poetry is where you find it by INTRANSIT |
29-Oct-05/6:08 PM |
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Oh be quiet and mix the stuff. I wanna see if it explodes.
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| Re: brave new world still a bit timid by FreeFormFixation |
29-Oct-05/6:29 AM |
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"broadband subterranean tunnels" perfect.
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| Re: a comment on Poetry is where you find it by INTRANSIT |
29-Oct-05/6:23 AM |
You will recieve, this Christmas, from Dovina:
A new set of Sawzall blades.
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| Re: a comment on Poetry is where you find it by INTRANSIT |
29-Oct-05/6:22 AM |
You will recieve ,this Christmas, from Zodiac:
A cat-o-nine tails, Some kind of fastening device-fuzzy velcro-, possibly just rope, and a ball gag.
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| Re: when i make sculpture by ay deee |
28-Oct-05/3:53 PM |
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rogue -do- in the fourth.
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