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island nation

by skaskowski

Member since 2001 · Posted 28 Oct 2005 · 8 comments

she set the coffee pot upon the stove and stoked the flame a bit. then set upon the sofa to unwind and watch her favorite flick. she must have fallen fast asleep the blaze licked off her blushing cheeks. so embarassed and so damn naive. it must have been wes anderson.

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[7] Dovina 29-Oct-05/12:07 PM Reply
The metaphor works pretty well until the last two lines.
[10] zodiac 30-Oct-05/6:24 AM Reply
skaskowski nation of islands (free verse)
it placed the container of coffee in
the cooker and it resupplied the flame in a fire
then it placed in the bank
in order to it completes in his sympathy
and in order to it gives the attention
it shakes this it should cases fast in the sleep
it has the fracture of that relaxedly blooming her cheeks
is licked this way and this gullible vloek
ways should it is wes Anderson it is.
[n/a] ALChemy › zodiac 30-Oct-05/8:19 AM Reply
It's addictive isn't it?
[n/a] skaskowski › zodiac 31-Oct-05/4:03 AM Reply
that was cancerous. get it? sign of the zodiac?
[n/a] ALChemy › skaskowski 31-Oct-05/7:50 AM Reply
No I'm canserous (July 8). This was probably at one time Russian.
[10] zodiac › ALChemy 1-Nov-05/3:12 AM Reply
I'm cancer. The best part is "should it is wes Anderson it is."
[n/a] ALChemy › zodiac 1-Nov-05/9:00 AM Reply
The worst part is I misspelled cancerous. The best part is your version sounds like Buffalo Bill from Silence of the Lambs ("It puts the lotion on its skin and puts it back in the bucket again.")
[n/a] INTRANSIT 1-Nov-05/3:02 PM Reply
Which it is soused hogs face?