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island nation (Free verse) by skaskowski she set the coffee pot upon
the stove and stoked the flame a bit.
then set upon the sofa
to unwind and watch her favorite flick.
she must have fallen fast asleep
the blaze licked off her blushing cheeks.
so embarassed and so damn naive.
it must have been wes anderson.
Up the ladder:
Dreams of Neverland: Invitation to Neverland
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Dreams of Neverland: The First Encounter
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Posted: October 28, 2005 11:25 PM PDT; Last modified: October 28, 2005 11:25 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.2086053 Overall Rank: 4478 Comments:
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Dovina @ 209.247.222.91
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29-Oct-05/12:07 PM
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The metaphor works pretty well until the last two lines.
skaskowski nation of islands (free verse)
it placed the container of coffee in the cooker and it resupplied the flame in a fire then it placed in the bank in order to it completes in his sympathy and in order to it gives the attention it shakes this it should cases fast in the sleep it has the fracture of that relaxedly blooming her cheeks is licked this way and this gullible vloek ways should it is wes Anderson it is.
It's addictive isn't it?
that was cancerous. get it? sign of the zodiac?
No I'm canserous (July 8). This was probably at one time Russian.
I'm cancer. The best part is "should it is wes Anderson it is."
The worst part is I misspelled cancerous. The best part is your version sounds like Buffalo Bill from Silence of the Lambs ("It puts the lotion on its skin and puts it back in the bucket again.")
Which it is soused hogs face?
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