poemranker ::quetzalcoatl by ThePariahDog

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Free verse № 157084

quetzalcoatl

Member since 2003 · Posted 24 May 2009 · 3 comments

scaling the tower cold-blooded and crammed in a silver bullet shot through the night sky we stopped short of the door intertwining with passion slowly sliding in molting our outer layers the bird lay clutched with claws she screams the serpent's name in passionate praise of a naked god for a time, feathers fly bodies roaring like thunder that woke me to morning as silence stood bare the serpent sank back to the depths below

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[8] Freethinker1602 25-May-09/6:09 PM Reply
one of the better more recent posts, gratz.
[8] Dovina 11-Jun-09/7:46 PM Reply
Wish I knew the legend, some good lines
[8] madamefrufru 14-Jul-09/5:18 AM Reply
I like it. NOt sure about last two lines. I struggle with them too.