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To The Modern Black Standard (Free verse) by ALChemy Rid
the infinite redirect-
ed slave lineage
models for
a
76 Coupe Deville, civil
hero dealer of pleasure
and painkillers.
Lest ye
be written in the book
of cattle people who
you prod with pimp cain
or cocaine or staff of god.
What's the difference?
Still the man's bitches.
And those hos and bitches
twichin' ass or kitchen grease
slave to the neo-slave,
maids baby makers.
You say it's 'bout money
you lie.
Eyes turn from bright skin.
For fear? For hate?
For lust?
You rage- (for the caged bird
sings to the white feline
(songs of Johnny Appleseed))
-"Why motherfucker, why?"
What's the difference?
Still the man's bitches.
Up the ladder:
Hindsight
Down the ladder:
For those of you
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Posted: November 5, 2005 5:38 PM PST; Last modified: November 5, 2005 5:38 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.166884 Overall Rank: 5025 Comments:
Oh, you are upset because I deleted a comment. I just thought you were a rambling idiot. :(
Oh, you are upset because I gave your poem "politics" a goose-egg. I just thought you sucked and LL Cool J did it better. :(
Oh, you are a rambling idiot. <:(
Wow! What a comeback. What's next "I know you are but what am I"?
Oh, You are a dick. Try denying that one Richard. <:o
What do I get from writing a witty comeback against an ass. Oh, glory me, I have defeated an ass.
No surprise you say "writing a witty comeback against an ass" seeing your head is stuck so far up yours that you don't know when to give up. Or is your idea to clog up my poem's comment section with your inane filibustering until I finally start deleting them and then say "Ha! See.
Don't bother. Unlike you I can move on from criticism.
Please forgive richa. He's a very nice guy who simply can't help getting in fights with people he essentially agrees with whilst online. I think it's something to do with the limitations of written language.
Already forgiven.
wow. I'm waaaaaay off. I thought it was a litany against blacks! HA! I gotta get out more.
Don't worry. Your first reaction is expected and somewhat intended. It only means you're normal. Irony can do that in a poem. It is kinda racist for a white dude (me) to criticize black people for their self image. So you're not waaaaaay off.
do you think black people intrinsically have a black self-image involving slavery and pimping. Now that is racist.
Saying "black self-image" is racist. Black standard is the popular image they generate. When black people stop calling each other Pimp, Nigga, Ho, etc. and stop refering to white folks as the man, when rappers stop rapping about how great it is to be a Gangsta, Pimp, Dealer, Criminal, etc. Then we'll talk.
I never denied being racist at some level. We all are.
Is it all black people that talk like that. Is we will talk when black people stop doing x a reasonable response to a black person who has never said bitch in his life.
If it was all black people I would have said ALL black people genius.
Of course it is all black people. Black is a term that refers to all black people. Do you think black swan refers to all black swans except peter the black swan. Are you mad.
Actually come to think of it I did mean all black people when I said "When black people stop calling each other Pimp, Nigga etc."
Would you rather some black people stop doing it and some continue or all of them stop doing it. Yes, some already don't but their automatically include into the all that don't. I will concede "Stop" should have been "aren't". It must be the racist in me slipping out again. You really should admit you're knit-picking at this.
The fact that you've studied art means some white person somewhere is surely calling you a faggot right now. You must really hate white people, too.
Even more so.
I've worked in constuction too. Which either counter-acts that or makes me one of the Village People. Imagine if they knew I wrote poetry?
Yeah, so basically if you're holding your breath for people without prejudice or dirty slang, you're going to asphyxiate. Besides, everyone knows black people's personalities are pathological, so it's not their fault. What's whitey's excuse? He was trying to be like black people.
Maybe we should great each other by saying "Well hello there honky and how are you this fine day."
True but Dovina still doesn't seem to understand how them negroes are.
It's shameful. She comes from Tennessee, but obviously one of the all-white parts. Now she lives in the most segregated state in America - California.
what are you like 5?
My poem includes words such as pimp, bitches, cocaine and motherfucker. If this is what reminds you of 5 year olds then I would suggest you get some serious psychiatric help.
If you're replying to the comment I made on your poem. I would suggest you click the little green reply link in the corner of my comment beneath your poem. Post whatever remark your teenage mind can muster but for God sakes stop stalking everyone who says something you don't like. Ya sicko.
I find it interesting that when people use the written word to say bad things about black people they call it irony if they don't really mean it. I would have thought using socially unacceptable words and thoughts gives the writer a kick, a reactance against censorship. That is not really irony.
What is ironic is you think it's racist when the poem is actually about perpetuating racism. In this way I really mean it. The first word is "Rid" as in get rid of all these stereotypes. To use words like "Nigger" as only a kick against censorship is not good poetry it's just being a Richard. Dick.
That is not ironic.
A poem mocking and criticizing racist stereotyping appears racist to you. How is that not ironic.
Irony: An expression or utterance marked by a deliberate contrast between apparent and intended meaning. Or maybe your definition is "like ra-a-ain on your wedding day..."
That you write a poem to be anti-racist and because of your own racism it turns out to be appallingly racist is ironic. It is not ironic when I comment you fail. By the way don't you think rain on your wedding day is ironic. I do.
Thank you. You saved me the effort of arguing genius.
How's that for irony?
I got some ideas from this - inspiring and bar raising.
Thank you. I hope those ideas don't get you in trouble.
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Try Nina Simone:
You know I smoked a lot of grass, Oh Lord, I popped a lot of pills
But I never did touch nothing that my spirit couldn't kill
You know I see a lot of people walkin' round here with tombstones in their eyes
'Cause the pusher don't care, child, if you live or if you die
God damn on the pusher,
I said God damn him
God damn him, pusher man
You have to hear it. When Nina says God damn, you know God's paying attention.
The spacing and indentations are just my homage to the time honored Poemranker tradition.
Who did write "gimme a pigsfoot and a bottle of beer"?
I'm not a Jew. I'm Black Irish with a little Native American thrown in. Can you imagine the amount of alcohol I've consumed.
I do love the blues though.
I can't find anything more of "The Pusher" online except a 30-second clip at Amazon, which I don't think makes it to the chorus.
For every black person trying to progress there's two more pulling in the opposite direction. Black people are still being held down by there own misconceptions of themselves and self imposed stereotypes. I was inspired by the words of such men as Frederick Douglass, Booker T. Washington and Bill Cosby.
The caged bird is stolen from Mia Angelo and used in this poem to represent a married or seriously involved black man yearning for freedom to spread his seed to the white pussy. You see how this is probably not what Ms Angelo had in mind. -Bwahahahaa!- Ms Angelo.
In the last election, 58% of Americans with passports voted Democrat, 35% voted Republican.
So democrats are like women in the 1950s.
Personally I think both parties are old fashioned.