replying on when i make sculpture by ay deee
28 Oct 2005, 3:37 PM
Let us consider the phone: You, "hang up" on someone, yet, the phone still hangs down upon it's hook. Both at exactly the same moment.
on Slim and Pretty, Or Not by Dovina
21 Oct 2005, 2:03 PM
*TWIST* there's a match for you.
Thank got for rubenesquenesses. es.
Thank got for rubenesquenesses. es.
on Leg by jessicazee
21 Oct 2005, 2:01 PM
What? No vvvvipvvvvvipvvvvvvvip of corduroy?
replying on Farm animals by INTRANSIT
21 Oct 2005, 1:58 PM
Both are incorrect. I was thinking that the things we say -tongue in groove- have no meaning. We are word butchers. Not in the poetic sense, of course. More like, the thing itself and not about the thing. I don't know. How do you pronounce your moniker anyway? Is it <~>? or do you pronounce it <~>? I just wanna know.
replying on Farm animals by INTRANSIT
21 Oct 2005, 1:51 PM
And it is enjambed, as well. The poetry of Rumi i have has been translated by Coleman Barks. Is there another translation that is better? Or am I just missing the lyricism as well as my butcher block is missing a leg?
replying on Farm animals by INTRANSIT
18 Oct 2005, 3:56 PM
Ghazals look so easy but they're not. How does a butcher block wear then? They do wear. I'll work on the rest. Now? i need some. bleh.
on There is a journey tree by ALChemy
18 Oct 2005, 3:54 PM
I got here late. Add me to the barrage. However ,I like the dove/pigeon thing. The core is good. Lift that bale! Tote that barge!
on A Dark Account of History by D. $ Fontera
18 Oct 2005, 3:43 PM
Amen.
replying on Rocky Road by Dovina
12 Oct 2005, 2:16 PM
the decoration could be a reference to a love past or something of that nature.
on Rocky Road by Dovina
12 Oct 2005, 6:09 AM
if this isn't bait, I don't know what is. Good that you kept it simple, I'd hate to come down hard on you. LOL. Try to merge the two flaps lines together. and you have a rogue -as- in the last. I think you can merge the drowsy and blinking driver lines too. I love the sweet rememberance and the dual significance of the decorated mud flaps. Incidentally, four-wheelers aren't the only ones to get chipped windshields. I've got three in my Petes drivers side.
replying on In the berth by INTRANSIT
11 Oct 2005, 2:23 PM
and is it just me , or is there something just not grammatically correct going into that part. one and two jive but the segway seems off....
on Waking at night by Niphredil
11 Oct 2005, 2:19 PM
Stanza two: outside/outside the window. one or the other please. AND: IS racing to survive this night /OR another night.
that is all.
that is all.
replying on In the berth by INTRANSIT
11 Oct 2005, 1:36 PM
OMG ! ! ! That's such an obvious mistake I can't believe I missed it!!! Thank you!!!
replying on In the berth by INTRANSIT
11 Oct 2005, 9:24 AM
No harm done.
Don't worry about the title clashing with mine. two different sleeps. You have more periods than you need.
I would: Line 6-comma,line seven-delete period,9 delete period,11 and 12 delete periods. Till then? I think that can go too. Let the reins out a little.
I would: Line 6-comma,line seven-delete period,9 delete period,11 and 12 delete periods. Till then? I think that can go too. Let the reins out a little.
replying on In the berth by INTRANSIT
11 Oct 2005, 9:09 AM
Considering it's a CATerpillar engine, yes.
on The chestnut by richa
10 Oct 2005, 7:21 AM
I'm researching. back in a minute.