| Re: a comment on when i make sculpture by ay deee |
28-Oct-05/3:37 PM |
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Let us consider the phone: You, "hang up" on someone, yet, the phone still hangs down upon it's hook. Both at exactly the same moment.
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| Re: Slim and Pretty, Or Not by Dovina |
21-Oct-05/2:03 PM |
*TWIST* there's a match for you.
Thank got for rubenesquenesses. es.
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| Re: Leg by jessicazee |
21-Oct-05/2:01 PM |
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What? No vvvvipvvvvvipvvvvvvvip of corduroy?
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| Re: a comment on Farm animals by INTRANSIT |
21-Oct-05/1:58 PM |
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Both are incorrect. I was thinking that the things we say -tongue in groove- have no meaning. We are word butchers. Not in the poetic sense, of course. More like, the thing itself and not about the thing. I don't know. How do you pronounce your moniker anyway? Is it <~>? or do you pronounce it <~>? I just wanna know.
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| Re: a comment on Farm animals by INTRANSIT |
21-Oct-05/1:51 PM |
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And it is enjambed, as well. The poetry of Rumi i have has been translated by Coleman Barks. Is there another translation that is better? Or am I just missing the lyricism as well as my butcher block is missing a leg?
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| Re: Marriage by Dovina |
18-Oct-05/4:56 PM |
Marriage a-la Jurrassic Park:
Sure it's all oohs and ahhs now, Later there's running and screaming.
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| Re: a comment on Farm animals by INTRANSIT |
18-Oct-05/3:56 PM |
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Ghazals look so easy but they're not. How does a butcher block wear then? They do wear. I'll work on the rest. Now? i need some. bleh.
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| Re: There is a journey tree by ALChemy |
18-Oct-05/3:54 PM |
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I got here late. Add me to the barrage. However ,I like the dove/pigeon thing. The core is good. Lift that bale! Tote that barge!
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| Re: Figment by Dovina |
18-Oct-05/3:48 PM |
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A little thin but I get it. kinda.
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| Re: A Dark Account of History by D. $ Fontera |
18-Oct-05/3:43 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Rocky Road by Dovina |
12-Oct-05/2:16 PM |
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the decoration could be a reference to a love past or something of that nature.
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| Re: Adelaide by wilco |
12-Oct-05/6:12 AM |
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"grain of salt and spread it through my wounds" that's the stuff !
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| Re: Rocky Road by Dovina |
12-Oct-05/6:09 AM |
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if this isn't bait, I don't know what is. Good that you kept it simple, I'd hate to come down hard on you. LOL. Try to merge the two flaps lines together. and you have a rogue -as- in the last. I think you can merge the drowsy and blinking driver lines too. I love the sweet rememberance and the dual significance of the decorated mud flaps. Incidentally, four-wheelers aren't the only ones to get chipped windshields. I've got three in my Petes drivers side.
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| Re: a comment on In the berth by INTRANSIT |
11-Oct-05/2:23 PM |
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and is it just me , or is there something just not grammatically correct going into that part. one and two jive but the segway seems off....
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| Re: Waking at night by Niphredil |
11-Oct-05/2:19 PM |
Stanza two: outside/outside the window. one or the other please. AND: IS racing to survive this night /OR another night.
that is all.
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| Re: a comment on In the berth by INTRANSIT |
11-Oct-05/1:36 PM |
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OMG ! ! ! That's such an obvious mistake I can't believe I missed it!!! Thank you!!!
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| Re: a comment on In the berth by INTRANSIT |
11-Oct-05/9:24 AM |
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| Re: Sleep by ALChemy |
11-Oct-05/9:20 AM |
Don't worry about the title clashing with mine. two different sleeps. You have more periods than you need.
I would: Line 6-comma,line seven-delete period,9 delete period,11 and 12 delete periods. Till then? I think that can go too. Let the reins out a little.
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| Re: a comment on In the berth by INTRANSIT |
11-Oct-05/9:09 AM |
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Considering it's a CATerpillar engine, yes.
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| Re: The chestnut by richa |
10-Oct-05/7:21 AM |
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I'm researching. back in a minute.
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