| Re: Untitled by midnight |
16-Jul-02/10:13 PM |
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This is as didactic as I.
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| Re: Wither by agent008 |
16-Jul-02/10:12 PM |
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008 was an asshole. He doublecrossed 007.
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| Re: Dragon's Dream by HolyKnightOfFaith |
16-Jul-02/10:10 PM |
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Good god you know they don't exist right?? 7 for having the decency to not call it a haiku.
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| Re: life by -=??lilaznjen??=- |
16-Jul-02/9:59 PM |
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Are you anusless or something?
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| Re: AIDS in a Glass by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
10-Jul-02/9:30 PM |
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Dude you see Crank Yankers last night? I'm not surprised.
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| Re: KAT 2 by nentwined |
10-Jul-02/9:23 PM |
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The irony of this poem is the graphic rigidity of its format. Perhaps you can look into that quality of the poem - the idea that the poetry is in itself a restriction from which you are unable, as a poet, to be free from. And I think the selective capitalization is really a small fish to be frying, I'd focus on the big idea a bit more.
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| Re: Angelic Triumvirate by Sterling5583 |
10-Jul-02/9:20 PM |
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This is so self-centered it bothers me. It actually seems quite sincere. So it's really good in that sense. I can't fault the preachyness, as much as I'd like to. Although I didn't enjoy this poem, it's pretty good.
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| Re: Quiet by kissmeufool58 |
10-Jul-02/9:18 PM |
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People from other cities used to drive for miles just for a taste of our ATL style
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| Re: How my head feels by Adriaan |
10-Jul-02/9:17 PM |
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Nobody cares about your brain. I can't relate to this feeling personally. Thus, shit.
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| Re: Drinking Gravel by unknown |
10-Jul-02/6:43 PM |
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I have three words for you: smoke dope
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| Re: Mrs. Robinson by roses are read |
10-Jul-02/6:42 PM |
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I'd imagine both of those colors are the same pigment: pthalocyanine. Aren't I interesting? Wait wait don't ignore me! Why are you drowning me out?!?
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| Re: pain of love: by Sapphire |
10-Jul-02/2:54 PM |
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The door is open, start walking Ms. Streisand.
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| Re: Z. by ErgoErgun |
10-Jul-02/2:53 PM |
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THE LAST THREE LINES SUCK HARDER THAN THE SUN IN THE SUMMER SKY IS BRIGHT. OTHER THAN THAT THIS POEM IS QUITE QUITE GOOD.
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| Re: Promises by blueiris1261 |
10-Jul-02/2:52 PM |
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| Re: mental collides by nentwined |
10-Jul-02/2:51 PM |
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Wow looks like I've influenced you quite a bit. Good work. This poem is great, I liked it a lot. It demonstrates and illustrates a feeling which can't be demonstrated directly, the sort of hazyness that is paired with thoughts of this nature. I would like it if it was a bit clearer - the "not yet" carries some weight but not quite enough. On the other had, the "not yet" is good since it doesn't bring any other entities into play, it simply marks one's place in time. I'd have investigated something more externally verbal, like "wait for it", that is, if I wrote this sort of poetry.
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| Re: Summertime by KatieKaBoom |
10-Jul-02/2:45 PM |
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good point, somewhat unique good job etc.
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| Re: a prayer for grief by mitchski |
10-Jul-02/2:44 PM |
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How come you never write poetry about being in love and getting laid?
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| Re: Holly by wlshepherd |
10-Jul-02/2:43 PM |
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| Re: Conversation Unspoken by JuddNelson |
10-Jul-02/2:42 PM |
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Wait wait wait here's my immitation of Martin Lawrence: "It is clear you have *women problems*"
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| Re: Farewell Song by jaalko |
10-Jul-02/2:41 PM |
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*slobbering noises for six hourse in the room nextdoor while you try to sleep*
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