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a prayer for grief (Free verse) by mitchski
I?m told, that grief will fade away
but of it, I?ll not give a day
I have known her close and long
a valiant friend since I could speak
but for another sighting of your face
I?d give but what today I greet
Humble from first arid breath
and humble I shall be come death
But long in things of flesh and bone
she has come by night in reapers sash
and privied me not, for what she told
with ne?r to do but take her hold
Length of years sees me known to for
my years will not she trouble for
Tis not my feet, first break of day
nor are my hands beseeched for momentous beat
when eve of day meets mornings wake
need of mind from me she?ll take
Walk will I, astride with grief
and ne?r to ask for sweet relief
for sound and long I need her be
Years to fro and nebile breath, to abide her she shall pass,
take she won?t her presence for the days that I shall be
but see her to or not a quest, will not she seek of me
A welcome friend for not is she
for visits few, my vainful plea
Long are greetings yet of radiant tone
and summons to an earthly choir
spare her well when light I show
but give her not in time of woe
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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5555556
Weighted score: 3.6240597
Overall Rank: 13576
Posted: April 15, 2002 1:02 AM PDT; Last modified: April 15, 2002 1:02 AM PDT
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That the sentences don't make sense and use very poor grammar matters less to me than the rhythym. In free verse especially, it's not always important, but in this case it just makes you look stupid.
You also might need to get your keyboard fixed. All the apostrophes have been replaced with question marks.