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Conversation Unspoken (Free verse) by JuddNelson
This isn't poetry. This isn't a love poem. This isn't one man's vague attempts at getting you to notice him in a crowd of the hollow-eyed dressed by proxy group mentality hard trance drug abusing charismaless painless pointless males you hang around with. That's not good enough for you. This isn't a cry for help. This isn't a suicide note. This isn't desperation Because I can live without you but I don't really want to I want you around me permanently I want to know your opinion whatever it may be see your smile rise brush away your tears instead of my own. That's not what I'm trying to do. This isn't a stanzaed chat-up line This isn't an incitement for dating This isn't Hallmark academia Saccharine verse dead on the page flowers that wilt after a month when the thoughts remain long after and the problems never seem to go away and the credit card bills come in at the month?s end and I wonder why did I spend ?50 on flowers? and then I your face floats back into memory and how your eyes lit up and I remember why. That's what I've done for you.

Up the ladder: Vic, so Bitter

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.25
Weighted score: 5.1827645
Overall Rank: 4789
Posted: May 19, 2002 5:25 AM PDT; Last modified: May 19, 2002 5:28 AM PDT
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Comments:
[5] hoopoe @ 62.254.32.4 | 19-May-02/6:40 AM | Reply
first draft
[8] necroscope7 @ 204.34.247.9 | 10-Jun-02/10:59 AM | Reply
Nice
[6] -=SeTTle=- @ 63.214.120.121 | 10-Jul-02/2:42 PM | Reply
Wait wait wait here's my immitation of Martin Lawrence: "It is clear you have *women problems*"
[9] Roisin @ 80.225.4.135 | 28-Jul-02/7:48 AM | Reply
A beautiful poem, it would work on me!Did it work for you?Bit about brushing away tears made a shiver run down my spine.
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