poemranker ::Vic, so Bitter by mogwai

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Free verse № 1790

Vic, so Bitter

Member since 2002 · Posted 13 May 2002 · Edited 13 May 2002 · 3 comments

A gentle creature, wouldn't hurt, Everybody knows, he wouldn't hurt. But to swallow and swallow and swallow, more than he can piss. And then he's under, glass, shatters when struck, like her face. The morning finds an empty tide, not high, but dry and the gentle creature longs for a purple patch, but she touches her face, swollen, and says, Vic, it's already here.

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3 comments

[1] anonymous 13-May-02/10:09 AM Reply
interesting way to express this image
[7] deleted user 25-Jul-02/10:39 PM Reply
Well done.
[7] Tintagiles 4-Sep-04/11:28 AM Reply
One thing -- there is no need for punctuating the end of every line.