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pain of love: (Free verse) by Sapphire embittered. empassioned.
bold the stroke was that cut me down
battered.
poisoned.
release me from this prison of you
Up the ladder:
The world's shortest poem
Down the ladder:
Where are you Eric?
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Posted: March 16, 2002 1:12 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:12 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.31203 Overall Rank: 13121 Comments:
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16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
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pleasantly simple, but I feel I need more to fill in the gaps of what's not being said. This stands as two practically separate accusations, ish.
try "bold the stroke that cut me"
and rework the last line to hold the rhythm .....lose that "of you" language
ugh. stop with this shit!
The door is open, start walking Ms. Streisand.
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