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Free verse № 78

pain of love:

by Sapphire

Member since 2001 · Posted 16 Mar 2002 · 4 comments

embittered. empassioned. bold the stroke was that cut me down battered. poisoned. release me from this prison of you

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4 comments

[0] nentwined 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply
pleasantly simple, but I feel I need more to fill in the gaps of what's not being said. This stands as two practically separate accusations, ish.
[4] anonymous 4-Apr-02/1:36 PM Reply
try "bold the stroke that cut me"

and rework the last line to hold the rhythm .....lose that "of you" language
[4] anonymous 14-May-02/7:16 AM Reply
ugh. stop with this shit!
[1] -=SeTTle=- 10-Jul-02/2:54 PM Reply
The door is open, start walking Ms. Streisand.