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pain of love: (Free verse) by Sapphire
embittered. empassioned. bold the stroke was that cut me down battered. poisoned. release me from this prison of you

Down the ladder: Where are you Eric?

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.2777777
Weighted score: 4.31203
Overall Rank: 13071
Posted: March 16, 2002 1:12 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:12 AM PST
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[0] nentwined @ | 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM | Reply
pleasantly simple, but I feel I need more to fill in the gaps of what's not being said. This stands as two practically separate accusations, ish.
[4]... anonymous @ | 4-Apr-02/1:36 PM | Reply
try "bold the stroke that cut me"

and rework the last line to hold the rhythm .....lose that "of you" language
[4]... anonymous @ 204.245.176.100 | 14-May-02/7:16 AM | Reply
ugh. stop with this shit!
[1] -=SeTTle=- @ 63.214.120.121 | 10-Jul-02/2:54 PM | Reply
The door is open, start walking Ms. Streisand.
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