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Angelic Triumvirate (Free verse) by Sterling5583
Making your own decisions announces your independence. The life you embrace is usually that of whom you owe your dependence. Religion, in my opinion, is a perfect example of this. You will probably, as your parents did, celebrate Hanukkah or Christmas. But to willfully accept God and create morals of your own, Despite any parental objections, is your decision alone. And if those guardians aren't there when needed, A sheep may stray, and the devil may be greeted. If you're lucky, you won't understand and show confusion on your face. This is a story of a fall from, and return to grace. How we handle death, is at least as important as how we handle life. You must know what to do when Charon visits a friend, husband, or wife. The journey from this life to the next, can be troubling for some, Especially when you believe, one's time has not yet come. When I was a young lad, my father walked out the door. When he died, a seed was planted in my core. He was betrayed and murdered by a co-worker and friend. Seven years later, my anger-filled journey would end. But only two years later, that seed had grown fully and sprouted. Innocence was lost, and I became concentrated hatred. A dark cloud hung over my head, leaving me in depression. Five years later, with divine help, I would learn my lesson. The battle for souls is eternal and relentless. When mine was fought for, I believed I was defenseless. But three angels were sent to me, to save my soul. Hush and listen, while I tell you their role. Angel one, perpetually cheerful, with no animosity. She restored my faith in the whole of humanity. Angel two, good and faithful to her deity. She restored my faith in God, and also my piety. And last but not least, there was angel number three. She helped me by restoring my own faith in me. I can concidently say that I am a completely new person. After having met these angels, my condition shall never worsen. This angelic triumvirate, I owe my life to. I look at my past life as someone I never knew. I have chosen my beliefs; they will be lived by until my swan song. I also abandoned the thought that parents and Caesar can do no wrong. I have started down my own path, as will every teen. What waits for me, later in life, still remains to be seen. These choices will be made by everyone. That includes even your daughter or son. When the time comes, do not enforce your views as the only ones. Or else your child may find solace in drugs, gangs, or guns. I have had the options to go to all of those. But I never did, there were better things I chose. Thanks to the angels, I picked up a pen and paper. I write now to warn, educate, and most of all, inspire.

Up the ladder: art
Down the ladder: shame

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.3076925
Weighted score: 4.4938827
Overall Rank: 12829
Posted: June 6, 2002 6:54 AM PDT; Last modified: June 6, 2002 6:54 AM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] beakism @ 213.122.171.144 | 7-Jun-02/2:41 PM | Reply
my god, this is the worst, absolute worst BS I have ever seen in my life
[3] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 | 12-Jun-02/2:13 AM | Reply
this seems extremely forced.
[0] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.245.180 | 12-Jun-02/2:23 AM | Reply
Those angels were surely sent to torment us all! O' beloved Jesu! I beg of you! Remove the pen from this tyrant's sinful grasp!
[n/a] Sterling5583 @ | 19-Jun-02/5:20 AM | Reply
If you don't have anything nice to say... Shut the FUCK up!!!
[0] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.245.180 | 19-Jun-02/6:44 AM | Reply
I'm just trying to help you, my child. One cannot expect to use poemeranker as a means of fuelling one's ego, lest there be weeping and gnashing of teethe. Forgive him, Lord Jesu, for he knows not what he says.
[n/a] razorgrin @ 142.166.107.30 | 20-Jun-02/7:41 AM | Reply
Truly 'tis an angelic action that this treacle leaps from your pen 'stead of ink. Not necessarily heavenly angels, though...
[7] -=SeTTle=- @ 63.214.97.114 | 10-Jul-02/9:20 PM | Reply
This is so self-centered it bothers me. It actually seems quite sincere. So it's really good in that sense. I can't fault the preachyness, as much as I'd like to. Although I didn't enjoy this poem, it's pretty good.
[10] forestchild7 @ 216.77.216.8 | 19-Jul-02/2:46 PM | Reply
how very enduring and sweet... I feel for you, but I am also going down the same path, and my parents don't seem to understand... keep it up...
[9] Sigh'ense... @ 209.245.64.172 | 31-Jul-02/9:40 AM | Reply
Very cool
[2] poetandknowit @ 65.101.212.9 | 25-Aug-02/8:07 PM | Reply
An interesting idea that gets lost in a ton of tedious language. Maybe with some work it would flow better.
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