| Re: February by half.italian |
1-Feb-10/10:03 PM |
Thanks for responding. :)
ok...It was just a simple point in time type thing, but I see where you are going.
What type of payoff do you generally look for in a poem?
I guess I was only trying to convey a feeling. Nothing more. I see that it could seem "incomplete" for some people.
I'll see if I can expand on it.
Have you submitted anything recently? This site needs some tlc from poem makers.
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| Re: a bit of theory by pete |
24-Jan-10/9:03 PM |
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| Re: certain things... by nypoet22 |
24-Jan-10/9:01 PM |
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| Re: End of day poem by ecargo |
24-Jan-10/8:59 PM |
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| Re: My Thoughts by amanda_dcosta |
24-Jan-10/8:55 PM |
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| Re: Farewell, Kind Lover by Dovina |
24-Jan-10/8:53 PM |
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Can you please fix this a bit for me. Just add some "a"s. I love it.
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| Re: With Old Light by Ranger |
24-Jan-10/8:51 PM |
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| Re: untitle by daggatolar |
22-Jan-10/11:45 PM |
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| Re: Withering Blithering Blathering Wavering by T. Jonathron Remp |
22-Jan-10/11:41 PM |
I liked the first few lines because I could keep the beat.
That must have been all you had going, because once I lost the beat, I hated it.
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| Re: Reunification, the Pong by http://mulberryfairy |
22-Jan-10/11:37 PM |
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Nice imagery....but forced. It doesn't feel natural.
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| Re: hi by pete |
22-Jan-10/11:35 PM |
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pete, you need some more LSD. Keep those brain juices flowing.
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| Re: Mother Mayday is Here to Stay (Stay Away!) by T. Jonathron Remp |
22-Jan-10/11:32 PM |
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not poetry. Somewhat intelligent angst.
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| Re: a comment on Gadgets and Poems by Dovina |
14-Sep-08/9:28 PM |
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| Re: Fan by Nepanthe |
13-Sep-08/10:38 PM |
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I don't understand... yet I like it.
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| Re: enter, do. let up, let loose. by FreeFormFixation |
7-Sep-08/1:09 AM |
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Hard to follow possibly because of the indentation. I like a lot of the phrases, but I can't follow because of punctuation and spacing.
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| Re: Gadgets and Poems by Dovina |
7-Sep-08/12:53 AM |
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I have a hard time reading "paragraph" poetry. Take out 50 words, and split it up into somewhat rhythmic lines.
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| Re: Are your eyes by hobojo |
7-Sep-08/12:49 AM |
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As lyrics, 7. As stand-alone poem 5.
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| Re: 5 minute poem: section by Bill Z Bub |
7-Sep-08/12:44 AM |
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I like the second verse alot, but the first is worthless. Make a connection.
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| Re: SWF seeks SWM by Bethy |
7-Sep-08/12:33 AM |
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Great poem! I love the rhythm. I remember the poem about your legs. One of my favorites! This captures the same feeling.
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| Re: Time to Leap* edited by hobojo |
7-Sep-08/12:24 AM |
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I personally like poems that give less details. Let the reader make his/her own conclusion. Give them a feeling, not how you are feeling. Lead them to the conclusion through visual messages.
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