poemranker ::SWF seeks SWM by Bethy

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Free verse № 155965

SWF seeks SWM

by Bethy

Member since 2005 · Posted 4 Sep 2008 · 11 comments

Wallflower, barstool, pink blouse, "(such a fool)" Salted nuts, alluring grin, whose heart, shall I win? Push-up bra, conversation, a drink on me, intuition. Breath mints, a condom too, sit closer, it might be you. Local band, favorite song, more nuts, this is wrong. Bartender, last call, feeling lonely, feeling small. Exit sign, above my head, cab drive, alone in bed. (written a bit ago, made some changes, thanks to you folks)

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11 comments

[8] Dovina 4-Sep-08/10:08 AM Reply
Great, been there, usually ends like this. A good description
[n/a] Bethy › Dovina 10-Sep-08/12:34 PM Reply
Thx Dovina, been there, done that, a few times lol
[8] SupremeDreamer 5-Sep-08/6:05 PM Reply
Nice work. I'm sorry that there wasn't a good man there willing to give you that sexual healing- better luck next time.

Blessed with eight.
[n/a] Bethy › SupremeDreamer 10-Sep-08/12:37 PM Reply
Thx SD, I'm sorry too, chuckle-chuckle and thx for the promising "next time" lol
[9] half.italian 7-Sep-08/12:33 AM Reply
Great poem! I love the rhythm. I remember the poem about your legs. One of my favorites! This captures the same feeling.
[n/a] Bethy › half.italian 10-Sep-08/12:40 PM Reply
I'm glad you liked it, and thx for the comments on my other poem as well. You flatter me...I got lots more...lol
[7] INTRANSIT 10-Sep-08/10:24 AM Reply
-more nuts, this is wrong. hahahahahaha.
[n/a] Bethy › INTRANSIT 10-Sep-08/12:43 PM Reply
Thx my friend, your poetry has made me smile many times as well. :)
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 16-Sep-08/3:36 PM Reply
It always amuses me when, in between thinking about shoes, women sometimes find time to write poetry.

Does the W stand for White? If so, isn't that racist?
[n/a] Bethy › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 20-Sep-08/12:11 PM Reply
I find the time for sure...you do too...Racist? nope...we are all children of this world. Shoes? I am not a shoe kinda woman, truly I own a few pair, but mostly they consist of flip flops, rubber boots and tasteful sneakers. I have but one very lovely pair of dancing shoes, which also I use for weddings, and funerals. I like to spend my money on male hookers lol wink, just joking. Have a lovely day.

and as for the "W" lets say that it means..."willing"

[n/a] ThePariahDog 24-Sep-08/6:59 PM Reply
the meeting seems random enough, yet the parameters are established. equal parts hunter and hunted