Re: Time to Leap* edited by hobojo	7-Sep-08/12:24 AM
I personally like poems that give less details. Let the reader make his/her own conclusion. Give them a feeling, not how you are feeling. Lead them to the conclusion through visual messages.
Re: SWF seeks SWM by Bethy	7-Sep-08/12:33 AM
Great poem! I love the rhythm. I remember the poem about your legs. One of my favorites! This captures the same feeling.
Re: 5 minute poem: section by Bill Z Bub	7-Sep-08/12:44 AM
I like the second verse alot, but the first is worthless. Make a connection.
Re: Are your eyes by hobojo	7-Sep-08/12:49 AM
As lyrics, 7. As stand-alone poem 5.
Re: Gadgets and Poems by Dovina	7-Sep-08/12:53 AM
I have a hard time reading "paragraph" poetry. Take out 50 words, and split it up into somewhat rhythmic lines.
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Sep-08/1:02 AM
Random words do not necessarily make good poetry. What does "Zombie makers came with cliches and syringes" mean exactly?!? No explanation you can give will correct this poor form. Sorry.
Re: enter, do. let up, let loose. by FreeFormFixation	7-Sep-08/1:09 AM
Hard to follow possibly because of the indentation. I like a lot of the phrases, but I can't follow because of punctuation and spacing.
Re: Fan by Nepanthe	13-Sep-08/10:38 PM
I don't understand... yet I like it.
Re: Mother Mayday is Here to Stay (Stay Away!) by T. Jonathron Remp	22-Jan-10/11:32 PM
not poetry. Somewhat intelligent angst.
Re: hi by pete	22-Jan-10/11:35 PM
pete, you need some more LSD. Keep those brain juices flowing.
Re: Reunification, the Pong by http://mulberryfairy	22-Jan-10/11:37 PM
Nice imagery....but forced. It doesn't feel natural.
Re: Withering Blithering Blathering Wavering by T. Jonathron Remp	22-Jan-10/11:41 PM
I liked the first few lines because I could keep the beat. That must have been all you had going, because once I lost the beat, I hated it.
Re: untitle by daggatolar	22-Jan-10/11:45 PM
and hot me?
Re: With Old Light by Ranger	24-Jan-10/8:51 PM
Not bad for a brit.
Re: Farewell, Kind Lover by Dovina	24-Jan-10/8:53 PM
Can you please fix this a bit for me. Just add some "a"s. I love it.
Re: My Thoughts by amanda_dcosta	24-Jan-10/8:55 PM
Do you choose to breath?
Re: End of day poem by ecargo	24-Jan-10/8:59 PM
pewter sky :)
Re: certain things... by nypoet22	24-Jan-10/9:01 PM
No doubt.
Re: a bit of theory by pete	24-Jan-10/9:03 PM
Léon Theremin
Re: February by half.italian	1-Feb-10/10:03 PM
Thanks for responding. :) ok...It was just a simple point in time type thing, but I see where you are going. What type of payoff do you generally look for in a poem? I guess I was only trying to convey a feeling. Nothing more. I see that it could seem "incomplete" for some people. I'll see if I can expand on it. Have you submitted anything recently? This site needs some tlc from poem makers.