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Time to Leap* edited (Free verse) by hobojo
As I lay I drift and remember currents flowing the sounds heard of nature unwound and emotions sour melting Smiles glances, caught in memory forever created together and yet so far musical attempts imagined or real? do I only see what I want to be there? And this is my time to shed old habits to grow just jump from the cliff do not fear what lies below just me alone but better than an unwanted place better to wait its possible I'll never reach the destination wanted but settle no more you damn fool don’t look back you’ve come so far be proud keep going leap!

Up the ladder: can you sing me a song

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.6666665
Weighted score: 5.3178744
Overall Rank: 3452
Posted: September 6, 2008 1:09 AM PDT; Last modified: September 6, 2008 1:09 AM PDT
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[6] half.italian @ 98.151.18.37 | 7-Sep-08/12:24 AM | Reply
I personally like poems that give less details. Let the reader make his/her own conclusion. Give them a feeling, not how you are feeling. Lead them to the conclusion through visual messages.
[9] Bethy @ 165.154.46.44 | 8-Sep-08/12:03 PM | Reply
I really like this, hits home somewhere in the middle...
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