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:: snowsounds (Haiku) by elementalidad owl greets the snowfall
silent night and wide awake
fieldmouse heeds the tune
Up the ladder:
back o' the fridge
Down the ladder:
Time to Leap* edited
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Posted: September 4, 2008 10:00 PM PDT; Last modified: September 4, 2008 10:00 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.3178744 Overall Rank: 3516 Comments:
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SupremeDreamer @ 64.9.233.156
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5-Sep-08/6:08 PM
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...Why is it I have this feeling that I've read something very close to this before?... -shrug-
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elementalidad @ 190.154.63.211
> SupremeDreamer
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6-Sep-08/6:53 AM
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I don't have many sources to pull from for writing haikus other than my imagination. Perhaps the picture painted here might be too predictable or just plain common?
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SupremeDreamer @ 64.9.237.147
> elementalidad
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7-Sep-08/1:40 PM
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Well I'm sure I've read other poems with reference to owls, etc. Don't mind me, I suffer from periodic strikes of deja-vu.
not bad, just that the harness of 575, like corsets, is too restricting and unnecessary even in haiku and church.
I'm gonna back Dovina. Loosen the reins a little element-
great haiku :)
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