| Re: a comment on godhead by ThePariahDog |
17-Dec-03/11:36 PM |
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Brutal and exact. very nice. 9
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| Re: a comment on Cast a shadow. by darby pyn |
17-Dec-03/9:39 PM |
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Thank you dreamer. I fixed it. AAHHH
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| Re: a comment on untitled by darby pyn |
15-Dec-03/9:20 PM |
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I go by scubasteve on another site.
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| Re: a comment on Head. by darby pyn |
11-Dec-03/6:13 PM |
is it the kiss at the end that leaves a bad taste in your mouth baba. yeah I knew that would
get some response.
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| Re: a comment on Head. by darby pyn |
10-Dec-03/8:43 PM |
thanks dreamer. I was hesitating to put this one on.
glad you like it.
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| Re: Death & the Twisted Tree by SupremeDreamer |
10-Dec-03/7:56 PM |
it's a nice visual. an epic in black and white.
for some reason I see "night of the hunter" in
my mind when I read this with mitchem as the devil.
very nice. 8
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| Re: Poppy,diamond,s and twoo coward's by The_Third_Isis |
9-Dec-03/1:24 AM |
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SWEET ANGST. I LOVE YOUR REVENGE. 9
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| Re: a comment on From Hell, a Vilanelle by horus8 |
8-Dec-03/11:32 PM |
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Punk rock accolades. a 9 for you horus 8
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| Re: a comment on No delusions. by darby pyn |
6-Dec-03/10:48 AM |
Thanks shuushin. this poem is a work in progress. I want to
add more I'm gonna work on it.
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| Re: a comment on Biased. by darby pyn |
3-Dec-03/10:30 PM |
I like your suggestion. "natural selection" has a great finality
to it. "evolution by war" seemed to fit the rhyme flow better
to my ear. but you make a good point.
thank you.
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| Re: a comment on I have thirteen knives, and a sore riddled Black pussy by horus8 |
22-Nov-03/9:40 PM |
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Nice imagery. by the way how is godswife. she is pure class.
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| Re: a comment on Transient by darby pyn |
22-Nov-03/9:12 PM |
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Thank you. it's been a while.
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| Re: a comment on the two faces of the bar social. by darby pyn |
13-Oct-03/11:13 AM |
I was drunk when I wrote this. I just wanted to write and
vent. reading this back to myself I don't like it much.
oh well thanks for the critique.
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| Re: would i be considered crazy by silvertongueddevil |
7-Jan-03/2:14 AM |
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| Re: a comment on www.people.freenet.de/freeek/SajjadAli.swf by darby pyn |
5-Jan-03/12:23 AM |
Not the beer.
well Im off to the bar. Ill have a couple of shots for you.
thanks
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| Re: a comment on just another punk song by darby pyn |
5-Dec-02/9:21 AM |
I spelled attitude wrong. sorry
I'm a little tired lads.
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| Re: a comment on just another punk song by darby pyn |
5-Dec-02/9:19 AM |
PAKI I'm not trying to sway anyone to a certain style or
atitude about punk. the title is a rip off of a bad brains
song " just another dam song ". it's just a screw work
poem, song I wrote at work. I was bored. I do have
more deep poems more abstract. but this is not one of them.
I hope you liked it for what it is. gabba gabba hey.
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| Re: a comment on Tainted by darby pyn |
13-Nov-02/9:30 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Selfish by darby pyn |
30-Oct-02/11:39 AM |
the shallow grave is an actual " shallow grave"
the poem is about a true story.
this woman in florida. hit this man on the road. instead
of taking him to the hospital she drove home with him still
on the hood. pulled into her garage and waited for him to
die. then she and some friends burried him. I forgot how they
caught her. this was about 3 years ago.
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| Re: a comment on Selfish by darby pyn |
29-Oct-02/6:38 PM |
not bad. I didn't think it would fit well if I
swiched it. I was wrong.
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