poemranker ::Biased. by darby pyn

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Biased.

Member since 2002 · Posted 3 Dec 2003 · 3 comments

The sentenced attracted a thousand opinions community decision with no room for revisions. the final delivery a button away sacrifice and glory a target display. blind loyalty see no evil hear no questions tell no lies. strength in numbers overconfident condescending and arrogant. lost in the space between your conscience and soul blame, be guilty be a moving hole filled with the coal for the diamond harvest burn off the black to conceive the white. retractions, screaming, stealing and blood dead at birth money from mud. for your own good , in our best interest, no restraint no remorse. assimilate, bend be grateful scattered allegiance the price for the faithful. shattered limbs with no jury for grievance. natural selection. evolution by war.

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[8] Jeremi B. Handrinos 3-Dec-03/6:19 PM Reply
I would put "evolution by war" in the piece somewhere, and end at "natural selection".
[n/a] darby pyn › Jeremi B. Handrinos 3-Dec-03/10:30 PM Reply
I like your suggestion. "natural selection" has a great finality
to it. "evolution by war" seemed to fit the rhyme flow better
to my ear. but you make a good point.
thank you.
[9] dancin_n_da_moonlite 6-Apr-05/10:04 AM Reply
nice