Re: Face of Iran by Caducus	15-Apr-06/9:00 AM
I've been telling people since we went to Iraq that Iran was next. All you have to do is look at a map of the middle east to see why. It's not just about oil, it's about having the entire middle east pretty much under our thumb. Afghanistan, Iraq, Iran and of course Israel plus hopefully Jordan means you split the middle east right down the center, sea to sea. Plus, believe me, North Africa would love to start getting some of that U.S. money and this could leave a back door for trading with them. At least that's my theory so far. Nice haiku by the way.
Re: Genesis by Dovina	15-Apr-06/10:11 PM
Here's an Easter gift I googled up for you: http://www.ctinquiry.org/publications/reflections_volume_1/torrance.htm
Re: Skellington Bakery by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	16-Apr-06/10:53 AM
Good poem. Bad attitude.
Re: A Bronze Mule by Dovina	19-Apr-06/4:50 PM
I love this. I have no idea what it means but I love it.
Re: To Brittany by amanda_dcosta	7-May-06/5:56 PM
Very beautiful. Better than mine, me thinks. Good news: Her parents seem to have patched things up, at least for the time being. I keep my fingers crossed for her. I surely must post something soon in the hopes of winning the much coveted plaque of disgust from our ever insistent Mrs. Jehovah.
Re: Cupid Missed Two Junkies (slightly clearer, rambling draft) by Ranger	13-May-06/6:17 AM
Sounds like you're trying to show the love affair that addicts have with drugs. My problem is that you can't really tell who's doing the talking and who they are talking to. I guess maybe some solid points of reference to anchor the poem would help the reader to follow you. Right now it seems to be almost entirely metaphor.
Re: A Snap Shot by amanda_dcosta	13-May-06/6:30 AM
Not your best. It's like a post card for the blind, like beauty that's just skin deep. It seems to give me nothing more than a pretty picture which I guess based on your title is what you were intending. I just know you are usually much deeper than that and those are the ones I prefer. But that's really just a matter of my own taste in poetry so take it with a grain of salt.
Re: Drowning by Enkidu	13-May-06/1:48 PM
I too find love can be like drowning. On a side note, here's the most famous drowning poem I know: Not Waving But Drowning Nobody heard him, the dead man, But still he lay moaning: I was much further out than you thought And not waving but drowning. Poor chap, he always loved larking And now he's dead It must have been too cold for him his heart gave way, They said. Oh, no no no, it was too cold always (Still the dead one lay moaning) I was much too far out all my life And not waving but drowning. -Stevie Smith
Re: George and Samson by Edna Sweetlove	14-May-06/7:59 AM
It looses it's humor because you take the surprise out of the punchline. Try an approach that is more like this: Imagine my surprise, imagine my dread. A little voice whispers at the foot of my bed. "While ol' Edna's asleep-" the little voice said "-I'll give you some beak, hurry up, go ahead put it in my tail feather, oh lord it's so large" Only now did I realize that the voice was George. George my pet parrakeet and Samson his cagemate like to jailbirds in heat buttfucking in their cage Imagine my shock Imagine my rage two gaybirds are in my bedroom engaged in such an unholy screw. Well, I was irated. So I did what any good Christain would do, I watched them and masturbated.
Re: A Sexy Crucifixion Poem by Edna Sweetlove	14-May-06/8:18 AM
What, no rimjob? Ps. There is no loincloth. He's not Tarzan.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-May-06/3:40 PM
A 10 for returning from the dead.
Re: The Prodigal Daughter by Dovina	16-May-06/6:38 AM
There's a slight Dr. Suess quality in your rhythm that intentional or not is freekin' ingenious.
Re: 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	17-May-06/6:38 AM
Technically not a Glosa but close enough: "99 Problems" If your havin girl problems i feel bad for you son I got 99 problems but a bitch ain't one [Verse One] I got the rap patrol on the gat patrol Foes that wanna make sure my casket's closed Rap critics that say he's "Money Cash Hoes" I'm from the hood stupid what type of facts are those If you grew up with holes in your zapitos You'd celebrate the minute you was havin doe I'm like fuck critics you can kiss my whole asshole If you don't like my lyrics you can press fast forward Got beef with radio if i don't play they show They don't play my hits well i don't give a shit SO Rap mags try and use my black ass So advertisers can give em more cash for ads...fuckers I don't know what you take me as or understand the intellegence that Jay-Z has I'm from rags to ritches nigga i ain't dumb I got 99 problems but a bitch ain't one Hit me [Chorus] 99 Problems but a bitch ain't one If you havin girl problems i feel bad for you son I got 99 problems but a bitch ain't one Hit me -Jay Z
Re: Goa by amanda_dcosta	17-May-06/6:57 AM
Don't use stanzas in this poem. Lose the line spaces and just stick the whole thing together so it brings out the story quality of the poem better. "atop" not "a top", plus you've got alot of capital letters in the wrong place. Otherwise it's one of the best things you've written. Ps. I have no idea what the hell Dovina is talking about. She always wants to downsize poems.
Re: Old River Sherbourne by Caducus	17-May-06/7:33 AM
Nice image.
regarding some deleted poem...	17-May-06/7:37 AM
There's not enough beautiful in it to contrast with the ugliness. Show us a rose growing out of a dung heep.
Re: 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	17-May-06/7:53 AM
Oh now Edna, at least be brave enough to not to drop an "anonymous" turd on me. You know that it's funny.
Re: test by zanzina	18-May-06/4:53 AM
You failed.
Re: Seizures by Sunny	20-May-06/3:07 AM
Sounds good. I have no idea what it means.
Re: Numbers add to nothing by Caducus	20-May-06/3:27 AM
These mathmatical and number poems just don't do it for me.