Find stuff that is more unique to this bridge so that it can't be applied to any other bridge. Kudos for choosing to write about a bridge in Brooklyn that's not the Brooklyn Bridge.

Has a groovy beat poem feel to it. It was pleasant to read but nothing much really stuck with me except the lines Zodiac already mentioned.

You have validated her work in my opinion.

That is a deep scar. Watch out if the tide gets too high or too low.

I've noticed your line breaks tend to be more for visual purposes than for phonic purposes.

Well said. Maybe God does play dice

but I think he cheats a little.

Nice. Was there a specific purpose for using such feminine text? Don't get me wrong, it doesn't come across gay or anything. It just seems like you had a reason for using such tender language and I'm not sure what it is.

This would be relevent in the 1960s or to people in their 60s. Besides, ethnic people aren't trying to end racism through being nice. They're just being nice.

I do love the fact that I'm pretty much guaranteed a few fancy words whenever I read your poems.

Is this the one where you fight Mr.T?

Gettin' better.

Change "moulded" to something like welded or fused. Moulding doesn't work that way. Mould means to cast.
Did Egyptian gods knight people? Did you know Lucifer and Venus are the same celestial object? Aphrodite and Venus are pretty much the same goddess.
Still it sounds very beautiful.

I get mixed race children out of it. It's nice whether it's read slow or fast.

Have you seen the new Kanye West video?

"Tell me more, tell me more, that you don't got her preg
Tell me more, tell me more, cause he sounds like a drag" -Grease

Make the flow of both stanzas more consistant with each other.

"I must Blake you."

It's a wonderful life ain't it?

I keep thinking that she might be one of the many souls floating around in this blue-gray purgatory of poetry and chooses not to let us know she's here.

This is my message to her:
Sure he's exceptionally smart and inciteful but like me he's a man and will eventually shoot himself in the foot. Please Mrs. Z, if you can, make as many of his decisions for him as possible.

I bet the original version of this poem was even centered on the page.

It doesn't make much sense but it's disturbing nonetheless. Needs some kind of continuity.

Loose the multiple rhymes in stanza 2. It doesn't fit the mood of the poem at all. Did you mean "No(w) he looks down on you"? The rest is great.

Maybe the deer wasn't flying because it wasn't Christmas yet. You might want to use an animal that hasn't been associated with flying.(hint: Don't use pigs either)