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Oh Verrazano (Free verse) by Joe-joe
She stands tall, broad and is prone to sway
Bargaining eagerly with wind, rain and bitter days
Her dress is fastened by once hot iron and steel
A pearl necklace runs supplely along her winding frame
Her skirt is held in place with pins
Tacked securely to the edge of her border
By callused hands that fashioned her for nearly no wage
Some of whom fell in service to her
And others who lived to be served by her
Among the throngs of strangers who never peered from her towers
At the majestic city she would someday adorn.
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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.928861
Overall Rank: 9182
Posted: January 10, 2006 6:23 AM PST; Last modified: January 10, 2006 12:09 PM PST
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i think that the rhyme you use distractst he reader. since it came first, i looked for the whole thing to have rhythm and rhyme, and was a little disappointed when it didn't hold throughout.