Re: Flow by zodiac	11-Jan-06/3:47 PM
Recently I had a debate with someone over the use of 'this (is)' in a poem. I always wonder what happens when you pull it out - because there's always something happening. To me 'this (is)' is like a pointing finger, it's outside of the poem. The other party didn't agree. To him it was something he used frequently, without any objections. He liked the rhythm of it, and the decisiveness. I think he would have used your poem to prove his point. But maybe I would have too. I've got a problem with 'she dreams'/'she thinks'.
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	11-Jan-06/3:24 PM
Thanks very much.
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	11-Jan-06/3:10 PM
You should try 'Epiphany' by David Hewson then.
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	11-Jan-06/3:08 PM
Well - it originally was intended to be a poem about..anyway, it slipped off track and I ended up with this, don't know what to think of it. I like it and I don't like it.
Re: Blackout, Amman, November, 2005 by zodiac	24-Nov-05/6:13 PM
great poem.
Re: The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	24-Nov-05/6:08 PM
here'a link to the Laibach version: http://media.putfile.com/Laibach57 hope it works
Re: I'm too friggin' rich to even title this poem by T. Jonathron Remp	15-Aug-05/4:52 AM
Just saw the movie - good fun.
Re: More drugs. by darby pyn	1-Aug-05/5:20 PM
'while you spin in your skin' - best part.
Re: Wars Between Held Breath's by thepinkbunnyofdoom	1-Aug-05/4:59 PM
Great title.
Re: a comment on Observation of a stupéfait by Dental Panic	1-Aug-05/4:54 PM
I give you the apostrophe. Not the periods. The sentences have been cut by the stanzas. Why? Because of my breathing, I think. As for the meaning of the poem, well, I'm afraid that if I try to explain it I'll ruin my chances of getting across what doesn't seem to make sense. If you know what I mean.
Re: a comment on Endurance by Dovina	9-Jul-05/5:22 PM
I see.
Re: Endurance by Dovina	9-Jul-05/4:40 PM
I'm in the dark. It seems a very private thing to me, with strange imagery.
Re: a comment on Lover by Dental Panic	9-Jul-05/4:28 PM
I’ve made some changes. I think it’s a bit more clear now. I’m still not satisfied though. The part about the bus is important to me. There’s got to be some element of choice in the whole thing.
Re: a comment on pop by Dental Panic	6-Jul-05/12:38 PM
Thanks. To me it's like stripping a thing until nothing but the thing itself is left, something like that.
Re: a comment on pop by Dental Panic	6-Jul-05/12:35 PM
If Frank leaves you in the dark, maybe you should try to find a door. Like 'The Day Lady Died', that's a beautiful poem.
Re: a comment on pop by Dental Panic	4-Jul-05/1:11 PM
you're welcome.
Re: Today is very far away from a good day by Prince of Void	21-Jun-05/2:42 PM
better go easy on the tears.
Re: Father’s Day by Dovina	21-Jun-05/2:35 PM
I don't think this is a poem. It's more like a sermon. A poem has at least two faces. A sermon only one.
Re: Flicking by INTRANSIT	21-Jun-05/2:27 PM
Nice. I should skip the amazement: if it's there, the poem should prove it. Not your telling me.
Re: Wash by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	21-Jun-05/1:54 PM
Don't care much for those animals. Who does? But the Lost Socks - now there's one of life's great mysteries. Two go in - one comes out.