| Re: a comment on on passing through some small town by Dental Panic |
13-Jun-05/4:02 AM |
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I know. Bird droppings. One finger opinions. Poemranker folkore.
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| Re: -750,000 in Rwanda by ALChemy |
12-Jun-05/11:14 AM |
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I think this is a very bad poem. It doesnât hit hard, it hits the spot where the blowâs already been taken. And if it did not affect you, eleven years ago, this poem certainly will not change that. And how is it âemotionally involvedâ? It deals with the Rwanda genocide in a kind of moralistic tone of voice, the âwe all are guiltyâthing, and then, in the commentaries, itâs about sleep and dead and heap, blahblahblah, very abstract, technical, not personal at all â it should have known at least ONE name of a Tutsi family for it to become more then what it is now: simply a flat piece of socalled âinvolvedâ poetry. So whatâs your next piece about? Bosnia? Darfur? The famine in North Korea? The Cultural Revolution? Iraq, maybe? Kyoto?
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| Re: Perfect place by gothiclovepoetiss |
12-Jun-05/4:16 AM |
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Strangest limerick I've ever read. Pretty dull poem, though.
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| Re: Dovecote by zodiac |
6-Jun-05/11:43 AM |
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I really start to like your stuff. It keeps me reading. Iâve read this, using the âdistractionâ poem as a kind of key â how to concentrate time, guess Iâm sounding a bit pretentious here but who cares.
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| Re: a comment on The Comedy of Mighty Rockmage: Combatting Old Age. by Don-Quixote |
4-Jun-05/4:05 PM |
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What's your problem? This is the third one I've read about the man, who is, like he said himself, simply expressing his opinion. Is it so easy to tempt the chumps into the frenzy? Make a fuzz, cause a buzz.
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| Re: The secret press by zodiac |
28-May-05/5:39 PM |
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I think it's poetry. Like the way the spin-wringer resonates through the stanzas. Doctrines and doctrines.
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| Re: In the aspens by sliver |
27-May-05/1:57 AM |
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Sure. Just center it and it looks like an inscription on a memorial. It's postcard poetry. The voice needs a little reverberation here. The words don't do the job.
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| Re: Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT |
26-May-05/8:23 PM |
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Just one more pipe and I'll get out of the zero drop zone. I'll rate this one some time hobbing on the Eyeball Massacre Train. Axial, that is.
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| Re: Coffined by Dovina |
26-May-05/2:33 PM |
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It's a poem about sloth, I think. But there's to much poet in it. Lose the voice, show the scene.
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| Re: Transition by INTRANSIT |
18-May-05/11:56 PM |
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I don't think haiku should have something to give away. The universe is not to be tricked. Then again, I don't have a real taste for haiku. They're a bit like sushi to me - I'll aways look around for more.
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| Re: a comment on wretched by Dental Panic |
16-May-05/4:57 PM |
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Thank you. The gipsy told me smoking will kill me - I'll light up, die reading.
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| Re: Bookends by INTRANSIT |
16-May-05/3:13 PM |
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I'm not going to vote on poetry, ever - but I like this one. It's a bit hypographic and you should buy O'Hara.
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