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Inspiration from absurdity

by INTRANSIT

Member since 2002 · Posted 26 May 2005 · 20 comments

When finally she'd tired of his grandiose butch she quietly opened ,reached into her clutch, producing a Derringer , jammed it in his eye, pulled the trigger as the crowd gasped: "Oh My! What was that noise?" For she'd shot him you see and sent him for a ride with an E.M.T.

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[5] deleted user 26-May-05/5:52 PM Reply
<< For she'd shot him you see >>

Well...suppose you got a Derringer's barrel poked in the eye and the trigger gets pulled and you scream: "I'm shot! I'm shot!", know what bystanders would say? "That's obvious, isn't it?"
Perhaps the title should be 'The absurdity of the obvious'?

But what I suspect is, I don't know what an E.M.T. is, so I'm probably missing the point. If so, forgive me.
[8] Dovina › deleted user 26-May-05/6:52 PM Reply
ENT = Emergency Medical Technician
[n/a] INTRANSIT › Dovina 26-May-05/7:10 PM Reply
Emergency Nudicle Technician?
[8] Dovina › INTRANSIT 26-May-05/7:13 PM Reply
Energetic Nutty Truckdriver
[n/a] Don-Quixote › Dovina 4-Jun-05/12:00 PM Reply
He buys his dope from me. I power america, and he drives all over it. Soon, he'll be stoppin at D.C. to show Bush what a twelve wheeled rectangular dildo looks like. Then he'll demonstrate what it feels like. And on that day I shall call out,

Hallelujah! Hallelujah! Hallelujah! Praise be the doped up Jesus 'n his twelve wheeler!! For then it will be Judgement Day.
[8] Dovina 26-May-05/6:53 PM Reply
Commas mis-spaced, but otherwise a tough ride.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › Dovina 26-May-05/6:57 PM Reply
It's just some junk I thought up on the road after seein one of the many "discussions" between you and Zodiac. You can flog me with a squeaky toy. If that's your thing.
[8] Dovina › INTRANSIT 26-May-05/7:00 PM Reply
I vaguely remember pulling that Derringer trigger. How's the Arab doing anyway, haven't heard from him lately.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › Dovina 26-May-05/7:02 PM Reply
Dunno. Like 'im though. And 'mage and anyone who'll whip me like the bad poet I am. I'm a maso-chiste.
[8] Dovina › INTRANSIT 26-May-05/7:05 PM Reply
He's like a little obnoxious brother. Kinda cute in a sordid way.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › Dovina 26-May-05/7:07 PM Reply
Which one?
[8] Dovina › INTRANSIT 26-May-05/7:08 PM Reply
You need another margarita to figure this out.
[n/a] zodiac › Dovina 30-May-05/4:35 AM Reply
I was on vacation with a weeklong bender.

"Kinda cute in a sordid way" is kinda cute in a sordid way. But I bet if I met you in a bar, I'd stand a pretty good chance. Not that I want to, I'm just speaking hypothetically.

PS-Saw a great poem about girlbees yesterday. Can't get it online, though. More to follow.
[5] deleted user › INTRANSIT 26-May-05/7:10 PM Reply
Rubber ducky alright with you? Nobody can make a rubber duckie whack like me.

I had just one discussion with Zodiac. It ranged from dykes to totems with a few niggaz thrown in on the side to make it semi-actual. I assume you mean Dovina. (discussion; not the dyke)
[n/a] INTRANSIT › deleted user 26-May-05/7:14 PM Reply
No I prefer the big rubber Dinosaurs with the squeeker located smack where the ... OH MY GAWD! I'M OUTTA CONTROL! Uno mas? Por favor?
[n/a] Dental Panic 26-May-05/8:23 PM Reply
Just one more pipe and I'll get out of the zero drop zone. I'll rate this one some time hobbing on the Eyeball Massacre Train. Axial, that is.
[7] sliver 26-May-05/8:45 PM Reply
I think perhaps the coroner would be better suited to clean up this mess.
[5] deleted user 28-May-05/11:25 AM Reply
It's like you said yourself Intransit: just some junk. There is hardly a story, while it suggests there is one, and what there is, is badly told.

There is so much more to be made out of this.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › deleted user 28-May-05/8:10 PM Reply
Originally, It wasn't meant to be a posting but to be tossed between them during. Zodiac hadn't been around in a while so I chunked it out here because, at the moment, I have nothing (I) feel is worthy of efforting. Maybe it'll bloom. Maybe not.
[8] fevriere 3-Jun-05/7:40 AM Reply
Funky.