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Transition (Haiku) by INTRANSIT
Crane stands in downpour poke poke poke fishing for crab as sun burns through clouds.

Up the ladder: Untitled
Down the ladder: Samurai

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5682
Posted: May 18, 2005 5:51 PM PDT; Last modified: May 18, 2005 5:51 PM PDT
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[7] deleted user @ 81.69.23.196 | 18-May-05/7:05 PM | Reply
Last line is a bit of a disappointment. I know; it's a haiku. Nevertheless, nevertheless...
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.116.204 > deleted user | 18-May-05/7:18 PM | Reply
Is it a disappointment because the title is a bit of a giveaway maybe?
[7] deleted user @ 81.69.23.196 > INTRANSIT | 18-May-05/7:22 PM | Reply
Ah, the title...suddenly I see it in a different light. I'll upgrade the vote
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.116.204 > deleted user | 18-May-05/7:34 PM | Reply
Not necessarily...I was originally thinking having the clouds dissipating would be better. Then I chickened out. Endings. My Achilles' heel.
[n/a] Dental Panic @ 84.31.86.195 | 18-May-05/11:56 PM | Reply
I don't think haiku should have something to give away. The universe is not to be tricked. Then again, I don't have a real taste for haiku. They're a bit like sushi to me - I'll aways look around for more.
[8] Dovina @ 69.175.32.185 | 19-May-05/12:29 PM | Reply
I always wondered how to get seven beats in the second line. Now I know.
[n/a] Alizarin_Crimson @ 24.250.22.18 | 20-May-05/7:55 AM | Reply
Oooh....you touch my ta la la....(ooooh) my ding ding dong...
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