Re: Settling in by INTRANSIT	14-Mar-06/3:30 AM
Nice. I have no problem with the way you animate - humanize - the house. You could loose some 'and', I think. Same goes for the 'as'. To me they're like nails sticking out a bit.
Re: Piano by Dovina	9-Mar-06/6:56 PM
'Every line a steppingstone, good for climbing up and down. Boy, is climbing fun, she says, does it ever get you jazzed, fine-tuned and ready for chords' you almost had it there - shame the fifth line didn't make it. using monster/monstrous - too much. The word gets deflated. I think the story is okay but the ending is poor. As if you were through but the poem wasn't.
Re: Read me by mystic enoch	9-Mar-06/6:30 PM
I disagree with Ranger. I think this is very strong, crude and pure. Just cut the part where you start about poetry. I read you. You got me. Who soothes my thumpin', bumpin' brain? Nobody
Re: _The Black Prince_ by Caducus	9-Mar-06/5:51 PM
To me this is just a piece of pretentious crap. Jeering winds that whisper seppuku? Imagine how that sounds: like someone has knocked its front teeth out. sssseppuku... 'surrendering my flesh for lips that became my war cry.' Yeah, life's a bitch.
Re: a comment on Lick up your ears by Dental Panic	5-Mar-06/4:23 PM
much thanks form a grateful drunk.
Re: a comment on Lick up your ears by Dental Panic	5-Mar-06/4:22 PM
No. Stephen Frears.
Re: a comment on Lick up your ears by Dental Panic	5-Mar-06/4:24 AM
Thanks.
Re: a comment on Lick up your ears by Dental Panic	5-Mar-06/4:20 AM
I've heard it - seen the movie too. Oldham's best part, methinks. Prick up your arse?
Re: a comment on =, <>, & . . . by Dovina	3-Mar-06/7:22 PM
'I enjoy solving puzzles and dancing around them when I think they are silly,' In der Dummheit ist eine Zuversicht.
Re: An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta	28-Feb-06/2:43 PM
What? No questions about Uria? That would have spiced the interview up. I mean, Samuël 2 makes a good read, but you've taken all the flav' out. Look at this pink cheeked, fizzykissy, woolywooly softy - not the kind of guy you see fuckin' another man's wife and sending him to war with a note for his commander: make sure this one gets killed.
Re: Valentine 2 by zodiac	16-Feb-06/4:31 PM
'then hiked back to the camp with meat and tin, his knife – the usual things.' And germs too. "Syphilis, gonorrhea, tubercilosis, and influenza arriving with Captain Cook in 1799, followed by a big typhoid epidemic in 1804 and numerous 'minor'diseases, reduced Hawaii's population from around half a million in 1779 to 84,000 in 1853, the year when smallpox finally reached Hawaii and killed around 10,000 of the survivors." Sorry, I'm deep into Jared Diamond's 'Guns, Germs and Steel' at the moment.
Re: a comment on Mentally Disabled by drnick	16-Feb-06/3:46 PM
Trying to make no sense is hard work.
Re: The Gold and silver dress by Caducus	16-Feb-06/3:38 PM
Her eyes asked me "will we always be like this" sums it all up. Soup many have swum in.
Re: Window Washer (midtown) by ecargo	13-Jan-06/10:15 AM
Very nice poem.
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	12-Jan-06/6:08 PM
I don't think there will be a 'we'. Just a very small group of scientists will be able to understand such a theory, some godlike elite. Or do you think that when they'll explain it to you, some switch will turn on the 'Godmind' inside your brain?
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	12-Jan-06/5:55 PM
In the interview, they asked him, after his 'no': why not? and he said that he couldn't imagine a Cosmic Creator that was concerned with the fate of a some stupid and cruel ape on a very tiny planet, circling an insignificant star, somewhere in the back alley of a small galaxy in this unimaginably large universe, filled with trillions and trillions of stars.
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	12-Jan-06/5:25 PM
When you cheat, there's no chance. Joke: suppose they create a supercomputer that knows all the answers. First thing they'll ask: is there a God? Now there is, it'll reply.
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	12-Jan-06/5:11 PM
I think I'll write my next poem about the second law of thermodynamics. In the meantime, I'll send this to Hawking - he is noted for having said that every time he hears about the infamous cat, he's going for his gun.
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	12-Jan-06/6:32 AM
Then he just pretends to play dice? Now that's something. I watched an interview with Edward Witten once. He was introduced as 'the smartest man on earth'. It was fascinating - I didn't understand a word he said. Hawking was fascinating too - when presented with the question: "Does God Exist?", he grinned, moved his two fingers and out came the mechanical voice: "no".
Re: a comment on Flow by zodiac	12-Jan-06/6:19 AM
Where did your reply go? Anyway, it's not that I have a problem with 'she dreams' (although doing dreams in poetry I find very tricky) or 'she thinks', but with the order in which you use them here - or does she think in her dream? Sorry for not making myself clear. Also I didn't mean to just pull out 'this is'. If you pull out a word from a good poem, the whole thing changes.