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An Interview With King David (Prose Poem) by amanda_dcosta
King David loved the Lord passionately. I was always intrigued by his deep love for the Lord that I decided to call on him for an interview. We were there on the dot at our meeting place. Me: Good morning, King David. It is indeed an honor to be here with you. K.D.: I’d love to anytime. It’s just that I haven’t spoken to anyone in a long time. I feel odd to be out here. How do I look? I take a good look at his attire. Dressed like another other guy, Blue jeans, T-shirt, track shoes. Me: (Smile) You look terrific. I hope you don't mind a few question coming your way. He prays in silence and after a minute or two he turns to me, ready for the interview. I order us a coke each and some snacks. Me: So King David, tell me, how long have you been in love with the Lord? K.D.: As long as I’ve known Him. Me: And that would be….? K.D.: Yeah, to be specific, I was a little boy, way back then, taking the sheep into the pastures to graze. You know the story! Me: (I remembered that part.) But what was it that made you face Goliath? K.D.: Them mocking my God! You think I’d sit watching those Philistines make a fool of my living God. I pledged allegiance to Him and I stick by my promise. Me: Still, no man had seen great courage at that time, till you, a young man, came on the scene. You must have had a lot of faith then. K.D.: You could say that. After Prophet Samuel anointed me, I had such a burning desire to please the Lord, that nothing could prevent me from expressing my love for Him. Nothing, absolutely nothing! Me: (Smile). I think I know what you mean. Could you tell me what made you dance in front of the Lord wearing almost nothing. K.D.: (Smiles a big grin). You know, when two people are in love, they do almost anything weird. This was a special moment for me…. with the one I loved. Love is blind, as you’d say, and my spirit was totally unaware of my surroundings. As I said, nothing could stop me from expressing my love for Him. It was more like, my spirit in love for Him, dancing in ecstasy. Me: What made you have such faith in God? K.D.: It was my love for Him. Faith doesn’t come all in a day. Before I fought the Philistine, I tested it out and grew when I fought the lions and bears in their attempt to steal our cattle. I’d say faith is more than believing, it is an exercise, something you are willing to stake your life on. Me: ‘The Lord is my shepherd’ is a beautiful psalm, apart from the numerous others you’ve written. What made you write it? K.D.: Whenever I took the sheep to graze, I’d picture myself as one of the sheep walking behind its Divine Shepherd. This was my idea of total dependence on my God way back then. I’d follow Him wherever He took me and not worry a bit because He would be there with His crook and His staff to comfort and protect me. Me: What message would you like to give to this modern world? K.D.: Always love the Lord and seek Him in all you do. You might have to run with the Lord all your life, as I did, but then in the end you will realize that He is your only help. Nothing else can make you survive except the Lord your help. Give Him all you are. Me: Thank you King David. I’m a new person inspired by one of the greatest lovers of the Lord. I hope you’ve enjoyed this interview. K.D.: Yes, I did. And by the way, what is this? Me: It’s coke. K.D.: Aah! I’m glad you invited me over. (Grins) I bet Peter must be wishing it were him here instead of me, drinking this new fizzy stuff. We both grin.

Up the ladder: wishes
Down the ladder: Carte Blanche

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Weighted score: 5.422622
Overall Rank: 3054
Posted: February 26, 2006 4:21 AM PST; Last modified: February 26, 2006 4:21 AM PST
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[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 | 26-Feb-06/4:37 AM | Reply
I have been trying a different style from my usual. It would be helpful to know what you feel about it.

I have had this in mind for a long time since Alchemy asked me to be more personal with the biblical characters I was writing about. Ref: some of my earliest poems.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 > amanda_dcosta | 26-Feb-06/10:25 AM | Reply
Sorry! Line 12 is supposed to read 'dressed like any other guy'.
[10] ALChemy @ 24.74.100.11 | 26-Feb-06/6:15 AM | Reply
This is a great idea. Some of the stuff is a little corny and you're likely to receive many a parody from the jokesters on this site se be ready. I found some of this very amusing in a positive way, especially the ending. Lose "lover of god", it sounds sexual no matter how you put it.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 > ALChemy | 26-Feb-06/10:19 AM | Reply
Thanks Al. (Your name sounds better this way. It's sounds too hard (harsh) when in full.)....

I know what you are getting at. A lot of ideas came to mind when I wrote it, but then, should that stop me from writing what I originally meant to?

Atleast this might be some entertainment for a few, perhaps. So enjoy.
[10] ALChemy @ 24.74.100.11 > amanda_dcosta | 26-Feb-06/5:34 PM | Reply
I was entertained, Betty. I've been thinking of calling you Betty, I've been thinking that I could call you Betty and Betty when you call me, you can call me Al.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 > ALChemy | 27-Feb-06/3:42 AM | Reply
Betty? Wow! I'm christened here? lol. By th way, who sang that song.... I forget now.
[10] ALChemy @ 24.74.100.11 > amanda_dcosta | 28-Feb-06/4:55 PM | Reply
It was either Peter, Paul or Simon, one or two of them I forget.
[7] MacFrantic @ 172.184.226.227 | 26-Feb-06/10:53 AM | Reply
This is okay, a bit roundabout, I liked the Love of God theme and the ending. Could've been better *7*
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 > MacFrantic | 26-Feb-06/11:12 AM | Reply
Just trying out a different style. Thanks for the review.
[8] Blue Magpie @ 212.205.251.119 | 26-Feb-06/11:22 PM | Reply
Line 2 the word 'so' before intrigued would make the following line grammatically correct.

I take a good look at his attire.
Dressed like another other guy,
Blue jeans, T-shirt, track shoes.

This should not be indented and it should say 'like any other guy'

I’m a new person inspired by There needs to be a comma between person and inspired.

This is nicely done, I am sure you could get published in a religiously oriented magazine if you tried.

However to my mind it is not a poem.
[8] Blue Magpie @ 212.205.251.119 > Blue Magpie | 26-Feb-06/11:23 PM | Reply
I should have read the other comments before I made mine, never mind.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 > Blue Magpie | 27-Feb-06/3:48 AM | Reply
Blue Magpie. Thanks! I'm not sure how close it is to being a prose poem. All the same I've tried.
[n/a] richa @ 81.178.217.160 > amanda_dcosta | 27-Feb-06/6:07 AM | Reply
I think you should ignore Blue Magpie's advice to put a comma between person and inspired. He seems to have a comma fixation for some reason.
[7] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 | 27-Feb-06/5:05 PM | Reply
This seems to get underway with the line: " What made you have such faith in God?" Before that, is seems cheesy and without much meaning. You can still keep it light and funny, but I think more cleverness is needed to achieve that.

From the aforementioned line onward, you're getting into the matter, but I think you could do it better with the original Goliath story and the great unliklihood that David could have slung a stone with that accuracy - that's faith.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 > Dovina | 27-Feb-06/7:19 PM | Reply
Dovina, thanks for the insight. There's a lot to edit and correct in this piece. But since I've already posted it here, I'm just waiting for public opinion on how I should go about it. Your review helps.
[n/a] Dental Panic @ 85.146.196.165 | 28-Feb-06/2:43 PM | Reply
What? No questions about Uria? That would have spiced the interview up. I mean, Samuël 2 makes a good read, but you've taken all the flav' out.
Look at this pink cheeked, fizzykissy, woolywooly softy - not the kind of guy you see fuckin' another man's wife and sending him to war with a note for his commander: make sure this one gets killed.
[n/a] Niphredil @ 132.68.1.29 > Dental Panic | 1-Mar-06/10:31 PM | Reply
*cheers* spot on!
[4] LilMsLadyPoet @ 64.12.116.14 | 1-Mar-06/10:44 AM | Reply
I wasn't as amused by this as I might have been. Too cheesy in too many places, but then again, alot of people praise cheezy to high heaven. It just didn't go anywhere interesting! I kept thinking you were going to make them lovers...so many places hint you are going there. (Intro>loved the Lord passionatly,how long have you been in love with the Lord? a burning desire to please the Lord, that nothing could prevent me from expressing my love
for Him. the whole dancing nearly-naked part.) I don't think this was an accident...and if you were going that direction, then don't pussy-foot around it...go for the balls, so to speak! And if you find that whole idea blasphemous, then take a really close look at this and revise...alot! (also, if it was not intentional, then perhaps you might want to talk to your priest...unless, of course he is of that type that would agree they were indeed lovers, and you are a pretty youngster.... LOL...Don't send me hate mail!
[10] Edna Sweetlove @ 81.178.68.233 | 18-Jul-06/10:23 AM | Reply
Another hilarious gem! What drugs are you on? 10/10 for humour. Not.
[10] ALChemy @ 71.241.66.181 | 19-Jul-06/10:14 AM | Reply
I can't get chat to work for me, sorry.
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