Re: Lonely Hearts by Stephen Robins	17-Feb-07/1:44 PM
Sounds like flarf from any officecomputer. You can do better: so do better.
Re: Out alone in the winter rain by Prince of Void	9-Feb-07/3:23 AM
Saw a film about John Callahan, the cartoonist. He writes beautiful songs too - he's also a very good cure for the inflatable kind of self-pity you're exposing here.
Re: Stopped Cold by coldiron	9-Feb-07/3:11 AM
This is very good. Reminded me of the time I was in Chios, made a trip to sit on Homer’s stone. Great view there (closed my eyes, tried to hear some sirens singing - only nagging kids, a mother yelling. The sea).
Re: Alternatives by Dovina	28-Jan-07/1:53 PM
The de-baathification, forcing their armed forces to go underground, was an incredibly stupid move - you really think them with the math can heal that kind of stupidity? Use a guy like Rumsfeld as guinea pig, see what happens.
Re: a comment on Body Worlds by Dental Panic	28-Jan-07/1:17 PM
Thanks for your comment. Outcreeping the creep, that's the trick indeed.
Re: a comment on Body Worlds by Dental Panic	21-Jan-07/7:40 AM
Thanks. She did. And her little touch of necrofilia turned me on a bit. But I’m afraid that Gunther, should he agree, would have us in some funny position, like looking up surprised or something equally stupid. You know, his factory processes 3000 bodies a year – that’s 8,2 body a day.
Re: a comment on Body Worlds by Dental Panic	21-Jan-07/7:38 AM
Well, after careful consideration I’ve decided to keep it. I like the pause – instead, I’ll change ‘waiting’ into ‘wanting’. Thanks for the reply.
Re: a comment on almost 12.30 by Dental Panic	19-Jan-07/6:02 PM
I was thinking about a reply to ecargo, but you took the words right out of my mouth.
Re: Brinkmanshit by Stephen Robins	11-Jan-07/1:49 PM
To be printed as a prayer for redemption in a rest-home - imagine spending the last years of your life being constipated: it's one of the hidden tragedies of humanity. Anyway, here's a link: http://goodlooguide.freeservers.com/
Re: Asbestosis by Stephen Robins	11-Jan-07/1:40 PM
Good title. And a good read. You could loose one 'school' in the last stanza, I think.
Re: new year by teenborg	3-Jan-07/9:20 AM
"Cream carpets were not the best buy, were they? So- where was I?" It made me feel pretty sick, this poem. So I guess it's a good poem.
Re: The Willy Poem by Engelbert Humpalot	2-Nov-06/3:09 PM
Hump more.
Re: Jesus Around Your Neck (Final Version) by Wakeboarder20	2-Nov-06/3:04 PM
Final Version - that made me laugh. But then again, it's not a poem. It's a sermon. Put on a purple robe and tell them hypocrites!
Re: Still by half.italian	2-Nov-06/2:58 PM
I don't care about your memories, I don't care about your taste, I don't care about your poem and I don't care about the explanation you gave - you're explaining your feelings. I don't care about your feelings. Being vague isn't poetic, it's boring, most of the time.
Re: The Hunter, the Hunted, and the Bystander by Dovina	2-Nov-06/2:44 PM
the image of a tire like a tiger's mouth doesn't work over here. Also the word 'guilty' is overdone. You shouldn't mention guilt - guilt works better that way, I think.
Re: a comment on Poem for Mahmuth by Dental Panic	2-Nov-06/2:28 PM
'like a patient etherized upon a table', how does that work for you?
Re: a comment on Poem for Mahmuth by Dental Panic	2-Nov-06/2:25 PM
Sadder wiser urgh? Yeah, maybe. I forced it in there, to make sure she wasn't happy. Still, it comes close to what I noticed there. I never make things up. I'll see about the enjambment. Thanks for the comment.
Re: a comment on Poem for Mahmuth by Dental Panic	2-Nov-06/2:19 PM
Thanks for the comment. Nondescript, that's reflecting the mood pretty accurate, I guess.
Re: Coventry nights by Caducus	16-Mar-06/8:52 AM
Unlike the sepukku from you previous post, here the Chinese font makes sense to me. It should be longer, though. The ending comes a bit too soon, I think.
Re: Endless Battle by rahson_s	16-Mar-06/8:06 AM
Writing about writing - it must be fucking good to be at least a bit interesting.