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Mentally Disabled

Member since 2005 · Posted 15 Feb 2006 · 8 comments

Analog to digital will you bring me my pipe? Slithering on the surface of what seems to be right Shadows sneak like serpents in barbarian's babble Now you find the truth you took soon to be unraveled Sniper sights hit teddy bears resulting snowy scene Anybody have a clue of what this all could mean? Diaphragms and diapers find their way into the trash The world is getting acne according to recent photographs My baby battled blisters and popped each every one Its time for trees and turtles to inherit trust funds You know not where I'm going no idea of where she's been Traveled thru a maze and found I started at the end.

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[7] Dovina 15-Feb-06/9:49 PM Reply

Sounds like a lyrical hodgepodge of uncertainty and frustration. Am I missing some theme?

[n/a] drnick › Dovina 15-Feb-06/10:24 PM Reply

I wanted to write something that made very little sense. In part to show how easy it is(at least for me) to get caught up in literary devices and rhyming schemes and loose all meaning. The first line alludes to that(in music, some say you loose something in the transition from analog to digital). The other part, if it works right, is to show that if you look too closely at anything you'll find it more complex than it really is. The last two lines refer to that. When I wrote this I imagined that more intelligent people would be confused and angry over the nonsense it feeds you, while the "mentally disabled" would enjoy it for its simple pleasures. Jesus, I'm writing a novel about what this thing means...let me sum it up:

This is here to fuck with you.

[9] Ranger › drnick 16-Feb-06/3:50 AM Reply

Nonsense poems are the greatest. Just change 'thru' to 'through', because this is easily a nine!

[n/a] Dental Panic › drnick 16-Feb-06/3:46 PM Reply

Trying to make no sense is hard work.

[10] ALChemy 16-Feb-06/10:20 AM Reply

I'm sure amanda_dcosta can tell you tons of stuff about the mentally disabled.

I like this poem, I haven't read it but I like it.

[n/a] drnick › ALChemy 16-Feb-06/1:57 PM Reply

That may be true, but the real question is could she without using a three letter word with misplaced capitolization?

I hope you don't think that this is my poem back to her...althought if you did, it would be hilarious that you rated it a ten just for the title.

[10] ALChemy › drnick 16-Feb-06/7:27 PM Reply

No, her husband works at a nut house. As far as "God" goes, yeah she could but why make her spell out Jehova all those times.

I based the ten off from comments alone.

[9] crazyknight 16-Feb-06/7:44 PM Reply

confusion, confusion is there no end to our confusion. man had existed for so long,
we have so much to show for it,
yet why do we get the feeling that we are travelling through a maze...............