Re: More drugs. by darby pyn	1-Aug-05/5:20 PM
'while you spin in your skin' - best part.
Re: I'm too friggin' rich to even title this poem by T. Jonathron Remp	15-Aug-05/4:52 AM
Just saw the movie - good fun.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Nov-05/12:35 PM
Take a look at 'Living with refugees' by Sorious Samura. You can find some info here:http://www.insightnewstv.com/refugees/
Re: The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	24-Nov-05/6:08 PM
here'a link to the Laibach version: http://media.putfile.com/Laibach57 hope it works
Re: Blackout, Amman, November, 2005 by zodiac	24-Nov-05/6:13 PM
great poem.
Re: Flow by zodiac	11-Jan-06/3:47 PM
Recently I had a debate with someone over the use of 'this (is)' in a poem. I always wonder what happens when you pull it out - because there's always something happening. To me 'this (is)' is like a pointing finger, it's outside of the poem. The other party didn't agree. To him it was something he used frequently, without any objections. He liked the rhythm of it, and the decisiveness. I think he would have used your poem to prove his point. But maybe I would have too. I've got a problem with 'she dreams'/'she thinks'.
Re: Window Washer (midtown) by ecargo	13-Jan-06/10:15 AM
Very nice poem.
Re: The Gold and silver dress by Caducus	16-Feb-06/3:38 PM
Her eyes asked me "will we always be like this" sums it all up. Soup many have swum in.
Re: Valentine 2 by zodiac	16-Feb-06/4:31 PM
'then hiked back to the camp with meat and tin, his knife – the usual things.' And germs too. "Syphilis, gonorrhea, tubercilosis, and influenza arriving with Captain Cook in 1799, followed by a big typhoid epidemic in 1804 and numerous 'minor'diseases, reduced Hawaii's population from around half a million in 1779 to 84,000 in 1853, the year when smallpox finally reached Hawaii and killed around 10,000 of the survivors." Sorry, I'm deep into Jared Diamond's 'Guns, Germs and Steel' at the moment.
Re: An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta	28-Feb-06/2:43 PM
What? No questions about Uria? That would have spiced the interview up. I mean, Samuël 2 makes a good read, but you've taken all the flav' out. Look at this pink cheeked, fizzykissy, woolywooly softy - not the kind of guy you see fuckin' another man's wife and sending him to war with a note for his commander: make sure this one gets killed.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Mar-06/1:17 PM
Really like this one. Topranked on 'famous last words'.
Re: _The Black Prince_ by Caducus	9-Mar-06/5:51 PM
To me this is just a piece of pretentious crap. Jeering winds that whisper seppuku? Imagine how that sounds: like someone has knocked its front teeth out. sssseppuku... 'surrendering my flesh for lips that became my war cry.' Yeah, life's a bitch.
Re: Read me by mystic enoch	9-Mar-06/6:30 PM
I disagree with Ranger. I think this is very strong, crude and pure. Just cut the part where you start about poetry. I read you. You got me. Who soothes my thumpin', bumpin' brain? Nobody
Re: Piano by Dovina	9-Mar-06/6:56 PM
'Every line a steppingstone, good for climbing up and down. Boy, is climbing fun, she says, does it ever get you jazzed, fine-tuned and ready for chords' you almost had it there - shame the fifth line didn't make it. using monster/monstrous - too much. The word gets deflated. I think the story is okay but the ending is poor. As if you were through but the poem wasn't.
Re: Settling in by INTRANSIT	14-Mar-06/3:30 AM
Nice. I have no problem with the way you animate - humanize - the house. You could loose some 'and', I think. Same goes for the 'as'. To me they're like nails sticking out a bit.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Mar-06/7:57 AM
Sure it's hair? Sounds more like a case of amoebic dysentery.
Re: Endless Battle by rahson_s	16-Mar-06/8:06 AM
Writing about writing - it must be fucking good to be at least a bit interesting.
Re: Coventry nights by Caducus	16-Mar-06/8:52 AM
Unlike the sepukku from you previous post, here the Chinese font makes sense to me. It should be longer, though. The ending comes a bit too soon, I think.
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Apr-06/12:04 PM
'someday they'll feel like the carpet in this truck stop. Heavily worn in some areas untouched in others.' memorable. I don't like the second stanza. I think it's redundant - like telling that you're gonna tell that the sun will set before telling that it'll set.
regarding some deleted poem...	17-May-06/11:36 AM
Very nice poem. 'parfaited' - perfect, perfumed and paraffin oil. Just a guess.