| Re: Safe Distance, 10-10-02 by Frass |
18-Oct-02/1:51 PM |
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The ending is bad. Perhaps he doesn't know. Perhaps your justice won't find him. And perhaps he doesn't hate anyone. It could always just be target practice. Or fun. Or something.
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| Re: Dilemma of a Crip by Ninoy_Instigator |
18-Oct-02/1:49 PM |
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'Towards Crips, people have anger' is tripe. Tripe tripe tripe tripe tripe. Now tripe, when well-cooked with salt, pepper, and a little oregano, can be good enough. In this case, it's raw. It doesn't fit the rest -- which isn't very good either. No feeling of dilemma whatsoever. Blah.
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| Re: realities <from above their brilliance is short-lived> by royalflesh |
18-Oct-02/1:43 PM |
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I'm assuming that's 'infinities, third stanza from the end line 1. His girlfriend should have a better name than mirrorgirl.
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| Re: Angel by Mutant_X |
18-Oct-02/1:38 PM |
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Did he have wings? Wouldn't that create an inbalance while dancing? Wouldn't you be afraid of tripping on them?
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| Re: purple and black gangstaz theme tune by rosiebailey |
18-Oct-02/1:24 PM |
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Margaret Thatcher as a rapper. That is the greatest thing done to her since they made her appear as Public Opinion in Offenbach's 'Orpheus in the Underworld'.
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| Re: The ballad of woosie by rosiebailey |
18-Oct-02/1:21 PM |
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Hmm, actually, the squirrel one is about the only one I don't like. This is seriously silly, which is good.
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| Re: casting couch by darby pyn |
17-Oct-02/8:52 PM |
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This truly sounds as if you wrote a rhyming affair and then stuck it in a mass of enjambments so that either we wouldn't notice or if we did we'd think it was modern genius. Are you sure it wouldn't work better in the original line breaking?
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| Re: FHjk by Dark Angle |
17-Oct-02/8:50 PM |
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This is either sheer genius or sheer idiocy. I really can't decide which.
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| Re: First Kiss... by loneshadow29 |
17-Oct-02/8:45 PM |
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| Re: a comment on On a chill morning by razorgrin |
17-Oct-02/1:45 PM |
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I stand by my opinion. And sweetheart, for your pebble-throwing to have any effect, I'd have to be there, asleep. And care. And we know how rare that is. If you break the window you get to pay for it and I'll do horrible things to you. If we're not allowed to mention what we consider a slight bump in your work... Come now, dearie, as if you wouldn't mention a bump in ours if it really jumped at you.
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| Re: a comment on You Can by Dariana |
17-Oct-02/1:38 PM |
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Razorgrin sweetheart, you might recall (all right, you wouldn't being tanked at the time) that I detested it before. Thus my shudders at the very thought of you two lovely ladies singing it drunk and off-key.
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| Re: On the Swings by Christof |
17-Oct-02/8:07 AM |
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| Re: a comment on On a chill morning by razorgrin |
17-Oct-02/7:48 AM |
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All we're saying is that it seems disjointed. If the word 'drive' were changed to 'go' or some other one-syllable word saying the same thing, I believe it would work better.
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| Re: Why Did God Do This To Me? by TripleHGurl |
16-Oct-02/7:04 PM |
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Maybe he did it so you'd stop whining. Apparently it failed. I wonder what he'll find next...
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| Re: unlucky by rosiebailey |
16-Oct-02/7:03 PM |
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This vaguely reminds me of an opposite version of Ogden Nash's 'Adventures of Isabel' (if that's what it's called, can't quite recall). Maybe it's the bear.
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| Re: Thanksgiving Dream Sequence by Venus |
16-Oct-02/6:37 PM |
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| Re: You Can by Dariana |
16-Oct-02/6:36 PM |
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'Climb every mountain...' This is a sappy, sappy musical lyric. It has been said before. I'll take 'Sound of Music's version, myself. Even if I don'T really like that musical.
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| Re: ~*Broken Soul*~ by Katie |
16-Oct-02/6:15 PM |
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Giveme one single, good, understandable and worthwhile argument for the addition of those ridiculous tildes and asterixes in the title. Just one.
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| Re: a comment on On a chill morning by razorgrin |
16-Oct-02/6:05 PM |
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It's inexistent, if she's driving her bike, scooter, broom out of the door. She appears to be levelling her eyes on his and suddenly zooming off, with no transistion. Maybe it'S just that Limonade and I know the house in question, and that driving out the door on bike, scooter, broom, whatever would be a tad difficult. It just doesn't quite seem to fit. We're picky.
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| Re: The Way It Is by Tascobar |
16-Oct-02/11:20 AM |
'Spoken without thought'? My foot. If it's spoken without thought, then it's not a taunt. It's a spoken thought. Taunts are thought up and used deliberatly. Like what I'm saying now.
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