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You Can (Free verse) by Dariana You can touch the lights of heaven,
if you really dare to dream.
You can dance among the raindrops,
or frolic in a stream.
You can climb the highest mountain,
or swim the deepest sea.
You can walk across a rainbow,
If you really do believe.
You can conquer any battle,
and befriend your enemy.
You can weather any kind of storm,
and set your spirit free.
So when your soul is darkened,
and all you see is night.
Remind yourself, that yes you can,
and it will take you to the light.
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Posted: October 2, 2002 5:45 PM PDT; Last modified: October 2, 2002 5:45 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.35 Overall Rank: 13057 Comments:
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DreamMachine @ 66.212.78.246
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2-Oct-02/5:50 PM
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I dunno about the befriending your enemy part but if you say so then uhhh...ok. Other then that its a Happy-Go-Lucky poem and I like it alot! 9
I dare you to "walk across a rainbow" . One more example of the most overly written about theme for a poem. Not the worst I've seen, but just as uninteresting and shallow. I thought we weren't suppose to go into the light?
'Climb every mountain...' This is a sappy, sappy musical lyric. It has been said before. I'll take 'Sound of Music's version, myself. Even if I don'T really like that musical.
Tintagiles, you only like it so little after hearing me singing bits of it while quite tanked.
Razorgrin sweetheart, you might recall (all right, you wouldn't being tanked at the time) that I detested it before. Thus my shudders at the very thought of you two lovely ladies singing it drunk and off-key.
I was actually about to call her on that one as well. It's a known fact that you despise that deliciously sappy stuff, and I adore it.
I only just read this and I'd almost call it plagiarism. It's like borrowing someone else's essay, then changing the words to make it your own. Climb every mountain.
aren't you cute. like my 14 year old step-sister's snatch. blaachk.
Also, it just isn't true. bad stuff happens, then you die. That's it. Oh, apart from the good stuff. But it's out of your control, don't fool yourself.
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