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Arts stare (Free verse) by Art Glocken Why do you look at me
with your watery stare
why do you look at me
with flowers in your hair
run to the watch tower
run but dont hide
run to the watchtower
look out for a bees hive
Up the ladder:
Sonnet Conceived While Standing
Down the ladder:
You Can
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Posted: July 27, 2002 8:36 AM PDT; Last modified: July 27, 2002 8:36 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.35 Overall Rank: 13051 Comments:
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johnnyfontaine23 @ 195.92.194.15
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27-Jul-02/8:40 AM
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I like this. It has a lot of elements to it. Water, Flowers, Bees, all very natural, which is what good poets use. This is a good first attempt, let down by a mysoginist tone.
I like the pure simplicity of this poem - nice work. Although slightly dissapointed with the last line
'Run to the watch tower'! NO. You run to the fucking watchtower you gimp.
The work of My Glocken never fails to disappoint me. Such a talent - wasted. Reminisent of gazza.
yuck 0
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