| Re: Slim and Pretty, Or Not by Dovina |
22-Oct-05/7:22 PM |
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But fuller, un-sucked-in stomachs make better drums!
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| Re: How often? by little_big_nose |
22-Oct-05/7:20 PM |
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'And how often do we separate our masters from the leash' -- what?
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| Re: The Marble Me by PsydewaysTears |
22-Oct-05/7:16 PM |
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The first two lines aren't bad. The rest...
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| Re: Leg by jessicazee |
22-Oct-05/7:14 PM |
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Not that I necessarily disagree with the poem (especially since I've never seen your legs), but whether or not a hairy female leg is nice or not depends on the shape of the leg. As a rule, hairy ones will be just as nice when shaved, though the reverse is not necessarily true.
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| Re: final act by <~> |
19-Oct-05/11:16 PM |
Ah, ye gods, ye haven't changed. Wonderful.
Where have you been, anyway? Methinks I've rather missed you, Tilde.
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| Re: Incommunicado blues (fixed, except for Dovina) by zodiac |
19-Oct-05/11:15 PM |
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Hmm. Not my style, but that doesn't mean I can't notice its quality -- a fact a lot of people forget.
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| Re: a comment on The nymph steals the farm-son by <~> |
19-Oct-05/11:13 PM |
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Then again, what else would one expect of you, dear Tilde?
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| Re: The nymph steals the farm-son by <~> |
19-Oct-05/11:12 PM |
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'Despite November in my heart/and December at my breast'-- nice. I admit I was going to simply congratulate ou on using November as opposed to another month, but the addition of December actually works.
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| Re: Marriage by Dovina |
19-Oct-05/11:10 PM |
Marriage is masculine? Gasp! (wait, well, I suppose it is in French...)
Now, does this apply to homosexual marriages? Where the idea is that managing to get married is writing a wrong rather than performing one?
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| Re: Farm animals by INTRANSIT |
19-Oct-05/11:03 PM |
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There's something about 'the sun the other as/rooster crowing' that doesn't quite work. I couldn't pinpoint the proble, but it's there. A comma after 'sun' would simplify it, but perhaps too much.
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| Re: A Dark Account of History by D. $ Fontera |
19-Oct-05/10:58 PM |
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ShamAn. Please. Hmm. Aside from that, 'tis all right.
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| Re: Air Guitar by Miggy |
19-Oct-05/10:49 PM |
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| Re: Forgiveness by flightoffancy |
19-Oct-05/10:45 PM |
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The first line is good. The rest... bwuh.
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| Re: River Valley Rose by TLRufener |
19-Oct-05/10:43 PM |
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Hmm. I actually rather like this. The bit about hte grandfather seems almost irrelevant, it would be fine without (arguably). Not all of the punctuation is necessary.
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| Re: a skinny man on the dock by ay deee |
19-Oct-05/10:26 PM |
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'Shaolin ninja on pole'... You've gone and impaled yourself, haven't you?
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| Re: Loving An Angel by Brego |
19-Oct-05/10:20 PM |
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I was going to rant about the angel, except you kept it as a leitmotiv. That's something.
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| Re: monday v2 by ay deee |
16-Oct-05/10:42 PM |
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| Re: a comment on never visit a diner twice by Bill Z Bub |
16-Oct-05/10:37 PM |
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| Re: Was Everyone Put On This Earth For A Reason by cabot |
16-Oct-05/10:32 PM |
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We were put on this earth to fertilise it with our bodies once we are dead.
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| Re: Sleep It All Away by somemorepoetry |
16-Oct-05/10:31 PM |
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Whien whine whine sentimentality.
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